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    Erisa_Lule2 years ago
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    I really like the main character, Mayar, his charisma, kindness, and leadership skills really do help in making the things that the boys accomplish not seem too unrealistic. I've also noticed that your writing has greatly improved since the beginning. It seems you've gained some confidence and have a clear end goal for the novel. The only thing I would suggest is giving the other characters more screen time because right now everything seems to revolve around Mayar. It makes liking the other characters difficult. Other than that one complaint, I am greatly enjoying the novel and hope for many more chapters!