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A pretty good fanfic, unlike other fanfics that strictly try to follow the canon plot like it's not innovative yet find a good amount of stability to justify the plot progression. The characters are realistic and I would say it's one of the good fanfics. Great job author.
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Thank you for the chapters
Thank you for the Chapters
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Hey Author, Just a few suggestions.. you can consider it or ignore it, up to you. Firstly, edit the whole summary of the book, it's filled with spelling and grammar mistakes, and the caps in each word is mildly irritating. While I understand that English might not be your first language, even using just the autocorrect on your phone keyboard would work. Cause the majority of the readers would not read your book after seeing the summary thinking that your book is also gonna be filled with mistakes like that, which isn't exactly the case most of the time. Secondly, Keep your writing style constant and don't change the POV randomly. The way you have written the first and second chapter makes it look like it's a roleplay and not a novel. In a novel people usually prefer it to be more of a paragraph based writing with you expressing the character with not just words like curious or afraid but with body language where you explain how their body reacted to their emotion. These are some things that you probably should keep in check and possibly update if you want more readers... of course this is my perspective and you are open to accept or ignore it. All the best, if things change I'll pop back in to give the book another try.
Thanks for the suggestions