doom_sensei

My god!!!!!! Blessed land this, blessed land that, I have the blessed land characteristics of a blessed land, which I can enter with the blessed land mark on my blessed land forehead; the blessed land space is a blessed land world that is truly blessed!!!!! I feel like I read the words "blessed land" like 60 times in 2 chapters. The idea is cool, but this is unreadable.

I didn't understand a thing. Terrible translators for this batch

Come on....you took the time to translate this! At least edit the paragraphs, it is literlally a 30 second job, how lazy can you be??

Dude... right now its unreadable, you need to edit the paragraphs

Good job then! Keep it up, i'm really liking it

I have already read this somewhere else.... are you the same author?

Unfortunately this is where i drop... This fic started really good to be honest, but mc behavior in this chapter is disappointing: not even a day has passed since he reincarnated and he already decided to train naruto and making him his best friend (mind i'm not against befriending naruto, but why training him??? Focus on improving mc first at least), then came the interaction with kakashi...oh boy, how could a 8yo civilian (orphan also) know the identity of an anbu? (even knowing kakashi by reputation is strange if you ask me..) but then he threaten him with "pressure" and treat him like an idiot! I understand not wanting to keep mc abilities as a secret and i liked that idea, but this is too much of showing off and totally suspitious. Anyway the writing style is good, so keep going, maybe i will come later to check out the improvements

i think narrator pov is better, just my preference. This hunter exam arc started great! Keep it up

I would suggest something like the power of Escanor from 7 deadly sins, an enhancer that grow stronger with sun exposition, it would also be related to his breathing style. Even better you could base his power and further breathing tecniques on the solar system: sun-moon-mars....ecc. this to compensate his powerless state in the night. Or maybe only sun/moon with a boost in strenght during the day and speed during the night with other condition like 'this killing move can only be used at 12am', or 'during full moon enemy cuts bleed more' ecc.

Boring!!! This is the exact same as canon but with light instead of ayanokoji... every scene, interaction, dialogue is the same as the anime!! What is the point to even write this fic??? I was expecting light to be his usual ambitious, arrogant and cunning self but here all of that is missing. He is basically ayanokoji but less dull...