Aydehan

Praise the Fool!!

Thx

I hope the person who touched him at the last moment wasn't the lord of mysteries or klein.

I’m stil waiting…

First of all, this review is written through a translator. The story written is generally good, but in my opinion there are a few points that are missing. For example, the romantic subplot or a bigger problem is the rituals that seem very forced. Yes, the rituals seem very forced and even make me very nervous while reading them. What, it's not even sequence 7 yet, sequence 5 wants you to mess with someone. This is complete nonsense. If he was going to attempt this kind of thing, at least the main character should have been rank 5. Also, the series should have started at least 4 years before the main events started. If you have studied the queues in the LOTM universe, you will notice that they all follow a certain route. There is no need to perform rituals, with the exception of between 9-5, because you are still human. Between 4-0 you have to perform the ritual because your journey from humanity to divinity begins. (The path of the klein is abnormal. It requires a ritual at rank 6. Likewise, it requires an anchor at rank 4.) I hope you will think about this story in more detail, polish all the rough parts and rewrite it. Then I'm sure you'll create a great work.

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What are the names of the star paths?

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Sequence 6?

I wish you had given the main character a surname, even if it was a made up one, during the translation. What I mean is that everyone uses first and last names when introducing themselves, but the main character only uses his first name. This inevitably leads to confusion.