Love me some tubular stories
You can now notice the single space behind Friya. Do with that what you will
It be like that sometimes, just remember to reach out to others if the call of the void gets a bit too stronk!
That sounds pretty dope ngl
Kissing the homies goodnight ain't gay, but this is a little sus.
A character with no flaws is no character at all!
I know right?
To preface my review, I have not finished getting up to date like I promised the author I would. It's been a while, so I figured now that I had the time I'd take the time write this. First off, I want to address the world background. The whole time I read, I was having issues picturing the settings. Were the ships large and intricate works of wooden art? Or are they stainless steel powerhouses? Maybe they're small modern fishing boats? I wouldn't know. There's hardly any real depth to the world around Polly, and I for one find that to be unfortunate. Then, comes character designs. I can't picture Polly as I write this, and most of the characters, save for animals, are just default character models in my mind, glossy white texture and all. The writing quality wasn't the best at first, but it did improve by chapter 11. However, what remained a constant throughout was the passion for the story in each sentence. It makes the story quite the fun read, unlike many others I've reviewed in the past few months. Now, comes the story development. It's. . . a bit rough. Just as the synopsis says, its a wild adventure where no one knows whats going on. It's not entirely a bad thing, but I think there should be a method to your madness, my fellow author. In other words, I think you should develop the reasons why Polly ends up in the situations she does. Perhaps a storm sets her off course, or maybe a team of bandits manages to steal the Birbalinda. Things that are out of her control, basically. It would still feel wild, with the added benefit of grounding the story in a way that makes sense, rather than her just being in places just because. As for your updating stability, its fine, but you'll definitely have to up the ante if you're trying to take this novel shtick seriously. With my constructive criticism complete, I bid thee farewell for now, and shall continue reading this when I can.
no longer continued*
Can't believe I called it
You can cut out the and. "that later became" works fine