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MisterFlare

MisterFlare

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Love me some tubular stories

2019-04-06 JoinedGlobal
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  • MisterFlare
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    You can now notice the single space behind Friya. Do with that what you will

     Friya's men were disguised as guards and the Crystalsmiths as miners. Without proof of the presence of a real vein, instead of sending elite units to scout the place, the army had opted for a softer approach.
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    He readied his arm to end the wolf's life with a blow to the head, but felt a wave of guilt as he saw the beast close up. It resembled one of his favorite dog breeds, but he quickly pushed the thought aside.
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    It be like that sometimes, just remember to reach out to others if the call of the void gets a bit too stronk!

    His nose began bleeding as the ball of pure wind Ardor became visible, and the headache was beginning to make him question whether or not he should just give up and die.
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    That sounds pretty dope ngl

    Before the trio was a truly expansive cavern.
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  • MisterFlare
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    Replied to MissesFlare

    Right on

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    Komory bats are a national treasure tbh, I wouldn't want to put them on the wrong side of the sword

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  • MisterFlare
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    [1] It's a before-after kind of joke referring to anal virginity...
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  • MisterFlare
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    Kissing the homies goodnight ain't gay, but this is a little sus.

    "So, let me kiss you and you can teach me how to kiss. Let me obtain better kissing techniques!" Zhu Geyue spoke while clenching a fist.
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    A character with no flaws is no character at all!

    [NPC Impression: Valerio will appear as a stoic individual at first glance, and is known for skillfully slaying a Viper Bear. Women are quick to notice his perverted gaze, and children find it easy to approach him. His peers view him as a rare genius.]
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    I know right?

    [Learn five martial art abilities.]
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  • MisterFlare
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    To preface my review, I have not finished getting up to date like I promised the author I would. It's been a while, so I figured now that I had the time I'd take the time write this. First off, I want to address the world background. The whole time I read, I was having issues picturing the settings. Were the ships large and intricate works of wooden art? Or are they stainless steel powerhouses? Maybe they're small modern fishing boats? I wouldn't know. There's hardly any real depth to the world around Polly, and I for one find that to be unfortunate. Then, comes character designs. I can't picture Polly as I write this, and most of the characters, save for animals, are just default character models in my mind, glossy white texture and all. The writing quality wasn't the best at first, but it did improve by chapter 11. However, what remained a constant throughout was the passion for the story in each sentence. It makes the story quite the fun read, unlike many others I've reviewed in the past few months. Now, comes the story development. It's. . . a bit rough. Just as the synopsis says, its a wild adventure where no one knows whats going on. It's not entirely a bad thing, but I think there should be a method to your madness, my fellow author. In other words, I think you should develop the reasons why Polly ends up in the situations she does. Perhaps a storm sets her off course, or maybe a team of bandits manages to steal the Birbalinda. Things that are out of her control, basically. It would still feel wild, with the added benefit of grounding the story in a way that makes sense, rather than her just being in places just because. As for your updating stability, its fine, but you'll definitely have to up the ante if you're trying to take this novel shtick seriously. With my constructive criticism complete, I bid thee farewell for now, and shall continue reading this when I can.

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  • MisterFlare
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    Replied to spicyscribbles

    Thanks a bunch for the words of praise mi amigo, I'll do my best to keep up the good work!

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    Thanks! How on earth did you bypass the character requirement though?

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  • MisterFlare
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    no longer continued*

    This paragraph has been deleted.
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  • MisterFlare
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    Can't believe I called it

    "Yes," Second Prince showed a smile as he replied. "I'm only a consciousness that moves puppets. I wouldn't satisfy you if you were to eat me."
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  • MisterFlare
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    Replied to mderinat

    Aye, I'm happy to help in anyway I can mate. I hope you enjoy the up coming chapters!

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  • MisterFlare
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    Same tbh

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  • MisterFlare
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    You can cut out the and. "that later became" works fine

    It was an old and heavy book, written by a cultivator that wanted to spread the notion of cultivation to the common people and that later became a classic of literature.
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  • MisterFlare
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    To be honest that's what I thought too, but my plans deviated while I was typing away

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    'Because you always fight terrifying monsters. Seeing you wipe the floor with some "regular guys" for once is refreshing. It's also the perfect occasion to check how strong you have become compared to Awakened with a master.' Solus replied while playing in his head the boss theme of Ultimate Fantasy 77.
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