Lol

Aside from writing quality others are okay, i hope you will improve with time, the story settings are not bad but it need some improving. Since you are new you should try to update more chapter, so that readers can read more and donot wait long for new chapters, you should try to update more and try to make the story more interesting . Story development so far is not bad , keep it up, i am expecting something good from it. Charecter design is not good plz upgrade your charecter, the defination of the charecter you give need lots of improving. The world background so far interesting, in the info i saw it, but i have a question is this cultivation type novel or western plz make it clear.

Kerp it up

Thanks for the chapter

Thanks for the chapter

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