The story seems good and has a lot of potential.Its enjoyable but I HAVE to say this, the Grammar was a Disaster...... How do you make mistakes like is almost every line? Write the narration in past tense and the conversation in the present tense....Thats how you are supposed to go. I would love to complete this novel but please with better translation, otherwise it was truely a torture for me. Hope this gets a better translation [img=recommend]