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the story is very well written, pls write many scenes of the mc showing of infront of the protagonists, and make him have a lot of knowledge.thank you.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] good luck.........................................................................

very good. I always like it when the mc is a mage and i hope he will do some research and have some uniqueness to his magic like some unique space magic, absolute defence or to bind enemies in space box or something.[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

keep up the comedy style and don't make it dark just because it is naruto. I like your writing style very much.[img=recommend][img=strong][img=update]

a very good concept and starting is also good. [img=update] ... keep up the good work. [img=recommend].....................................

bro where is the update? dying here

just for the concept. I like it when mc is a genius.

very good. keep up the good work.[img=update]

if u are looking for ideas for bankai i would suggest a hell type domain or something coming into real world and also add a clone feature so that he can avoid aizen's kyoka suigetsu by sending his clone or using his clone to see outside of illusion. And I hope u make the mc bit more of a kido expert and research expert.

please don't put freya into harem. let it be like freya confusing friends love for romantic love. freya and bell are a good match.

ideas:1: destruction magic like beerus 2: quantum magic 3: enchantment magic