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very good. I always like it when the mc is a mage and i hope he will do some research and have some uniqueness to his magic like some unique space magic, absolute defence or to bind enemies in space box or something.
keep up the comedy style and don't make it dark just because it is naruto. I like your writing style very much.
a very good concept and starting is also good. ... keep up the good work. .....................................
bro where is the update? dying here
just for the concept. I like it when mc is a genius.
very good. keep up the good work.
if u are looking for ideas for bankai i would suggest a hell type domain or something coming into real world and also add a clone feature so that he can avoid aizen's kyoka suigetsu by sending his clone or using his clone to see outside of illusion. And I hope u make the mc bit more of a kido expert and research expert.
please don't put freya into harem. let it be like freya confusing friends love for romantic love. freya and bell are a good match.
ideas:1: destruction magic like beerus 2: quantum magic 3: enchantment magic
can u pls skip the conquering part or like finish it in one chapter. and also pls use character conversations instead of only narrator pov. thank you