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EmeraldSilph

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    I mean the concept is great but at the beginning I just lost it. The main character just accepted his transmigration in 2-3sentences, "oh new memories coming in!" then "oh I transmigrated, cool!" then "I should go back to sleep" there is no conflict, he just accepted it, I suggest to edit the beginning, strengthen the foundation first before you lay down the plot completely, it is so illogical, also do not make the main character so OP from the start, he won't progress if he is OP right then and there, there should be internal conflict there should be a conflict on how to master things, don't make fiction illogical as it is. it will became cringy. so I highly suggest to edit it before adding new chapters.

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    My Summons Are All Gods
    Fantasy · Zhang Qing Tian Xia
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