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bro you are focusing way too much on romance and relationship development part it has to be there but if you put to much focus on it then the chapter just becomes lag without content just make sure you have that balance and focus on main story or other movie story that is happening in your time line also great in giving your own twist and interlinking all movie universes also one last suggestion keep the female MC number to limit if you just keep increasing the number of lovers to MC then that just drops the quality of work also great in adding the hollywood actress or characters also as you are considering mystical elements you can use movies like akhanda, damarukam etc also for his lovers you can also consider actress like eva green, Katheryn Winnick etc if required you can increase or decrease the character age, all the best good luck 👍 🤞👍😍👌

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bro stop referring to the MC as he now it's she make sure MC understands that and you also stop referring to MC as male when clearly she is female now souls do not have gender my friend.

please continue really great story but tone down on no of heroines really great thinking on linking it mahabarath you could also connect Kartikeya 2 movie also great movie that will fit in plot

Author just like it's previous book you should have followed the half stark and targaryen route you need you could have one of his grandparents have ancestory in valyria like you do in the current book please think about my suggestions, wish you the best 😁😄😁😄

you can have yao chen take him as an in-name disciple who couldn't Inherit his main linage but have help, guidance and teachings of yao chen who will also give him a technique which was traded with for pills in past this technique is heaven level but it is incomplete it's full technique might be di class and you could even have it's origin in great ten thousand realms.

great story you should keep it up also you should make a female oc stark as queen also like the conquer had starks are the most underrated in all fics and novels also they are one of the most innocent in all of GOT they always only wanted to keep their pack safe and do their duty as lords you already have great impression on first man in story follow it through make an OG female stark the MC wife along with denereys and have her understand their POVs and make them his wives(both treat each other like siblings but have healthy rivalry) a true family, pack, make magic rise again help north prosperous develop them with starks to prepare them for long night and maybe also start following old gods as valyria had fire and north had ice you can merge both pantheon after doom the radical gods die in doom and remaining join old gods to survive and make magic thrive

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