Disclaimer: I'm a friend of the author. You should know what I'm entailing by that. First of all, I'm reading this for the first time unlike with the other story. I can't compare it with a past version, so let's just take a look at what's here. Story wise: - The first arc's ending was kind of rushed. For those who dislike romance, congrats. The first arc didn't have romance even until Yue Ling died. The arc focused more around the musical elements, which I appreciate. Other stories sometimes focus too much on the romance part. That's not a bad thing, but their identity becomes.. worthless? - Yue Ling is a decent MC. We don't know that much yet, but she has some kind of secret. I've already guessed what the secret might be but let's see... - Her abilities are kind of OP. Even without learning from the System, she seem to have a cheat (?) that makes her proficient in that particular skill. Then again, it's only been two arcs, so we've only seen her pull out two different skills. - No ML in sight, at least for now. Writing wise: - Good pacing. Sometimes it gets too slow but not to the point of boredom. - Grammar mistakes are not that noticeable. - Characters are connected in one way or another, I didn't see anybody get thrown out after having served their purpose. - The chapters are pretty cohesive, but sometimes the paragraphs either get too long or there is a sudden info dump being dropped on us without warning. She tells us that she'll repeat the details over and over to make us remember, that's pretty nice. P.S: I swear to God if you don't pay me after this I- jk jk
To be fair, I know the author so my review will be pretty biased.. I've read the version over on Wattpad. I can tell you that the she has made significant progress. The previous one was so rushed. She told me that she planned on wrapping it up early, so I understand why the pacing was like that. This version is easier to swallow, and the conflicts that'll happen will hopefully be resolved without rushing. Her grammar has improved by a lot. The previous one was readable, but this one is much more pleasing to read. The only thing I would critique is the overuse of commas. The sentences are very long, it may not be to everyone's tastes. The romance got cut down (?) I haven't seen any of the boys appear although it's been 35 chapters. Not a bad thing though. Keep up the good work :)) P.S: Now you don't have to think about the chapter names anymore do you??? HMMM???