he goes to places as Law Matani then checks in elsewhere nearby as Horizon days later to make it look as if he just arrived. The logo is Horizon's logo not Law Matani. He's made Law look like a rich playboy with tattoos.

30 Chapters in and its just a crackfic. The MC doesn't need to be OP right away but all the author does is make her banter with the system and act like an idiot. Nothing about this fanfic is serious and everything is treated like a joke. Crackfics are just not my cup of tea and author should probably put that it is one in the synopsis. etc etc MC is also an idiot.

Story has the same premise as the story 'Ohh Sh*t I'm in Marvel' but that other story had sh*t translation and was annoying af to read/take seriously. So far this story is so much better than that and hope it continues that way.

you don't have to keep reintroducing the MC :/

Edward was never arrogant "in" believing that his plans were infallible. changes it to make sense more while still allowing him to be arrogant in other areas.

strong descriptions are fine and I don't mind that at all its when it gets to ridiculous levels and there is more descriptions and no plot/advancement. An example of ridiculous levels would be Shinigami of the Marvel World. It was almost trolling/sarcastic levels of descriptions and unnecessary words.

Please more casual. It gets too long winded and annoying to read like in the first 5 paragraphs. You're not really telling any important information except a few key details and the rest is just fluff that is filling up the paragraphs and i just start skimming.

yup in 1914 :c

Author must be trolling the readers because this is past reasonable levels of ridiculous. SIMPLE IS BEST. I am dropping this novel even though I really love the concept and am a big fan of bleach/marvel. Maybe if its rewritten or changed ill try to reread in the future but this pretentious, ( or trolling) writing style really kills any ability to enjoy reading it.

I keep trying to reread this story hoping i'll see it in a different view or maybe a change in mindset about it but i could not for the life of me get past chapter 20. The monologues and MC are terrible

i get you are trying to write a good fanfic but the way you are writing it is terrible. Too many unnessary adjectives that do nothing for the story and creating nonsensical cliffhangers for no reason. Almost every sentence has too much extra flowery words as if you are trying to write a poem instead of a fanfic.

you need to stop explaining stuff that isnt important and actually focus on plot. 4 chapters of nonsense

would be really cool to see the look on all the soul reapers faces when he turns into a hollow and slaps the fk out em xD

Marvel, DC or Star Wars are good options

I should have phrased it better. I meant in the way he says how much he had vs spent. The translater lists it like a math problem but in english we would just say "I only have around 20 stones left after buying this or wasting it on that". multiple times in this novel the translator starts with the total and then subtracts down to what he presently has which its annoying to read

+1 harem ruins stories most of the time

actually sharks have the smoothest skin on the planet. clearly this is a mistake :]