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Sevenfold3mthPostedWhile the overall story seems good so far there are a ton of grammatical errors, the author probably isn't a native English speaker so my suggestion is to get an editor who is a native English speaker and have them not only correct your chapters but explain what mistakes you made and what the correct way is and why.There is also a lot of skipping around which is pretty common with new fanfic writers, it's not necessarily a bad thing but it certainly doesn't add to the quality of the world.A lot of potential here, I hope the author can find some assistance with fixing the grammar.
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she's doing an impression of Luffy
"Gomu Gomu no Pistol!" Vivi said as she extended her now-transformed arm into a water jet and hit Sanji in the face. - Sevenfold8mthCommentedCh 47 Update and poll
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definitely this
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I'm the editor for a Pokemon fanfic called twisted garden, the discord has quite a few writers in it and we even hold some oneshot contests, if you want more advice you should join. https://discord.gg/ruYvV5cj
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
yeah it's tensura, for that system it's way better if you read the wiki than if I badly explain it to you
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
in Toriko the demons don't evolve though, I think that using tensura as a base (especially since you're not going to change his skin color) for evolution is a better idea, but if you want to go with Toriko style then bubble fruit or a similar level of ingredient is still my recommendation
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
since he can fight an A rank monster he should already be at the same level as a mid to high rank demon, if you start him at mid you can have him evolve after eating a super good ingredient/meal, like bubble fruit
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to
you would need to do some research to confirm this because I'm not sure but I'm pretty sure color doesn't determine power level in both Toriko and tensura
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
I can see either working, if you give him a gourmet demon I would say he has to take the human evolution path (saint enlightened), but if you don't you can make him a demon (or half demon) and he can take the demon lord evolution path. In my opinion, whichever of these you like more will turn out better.
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
np, I do hope that you give Jiro the spirit of a gourmet hunter like toriko
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
that's why Toriko knocked them because he won't kill something he won't eat
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthReplied to S0M3_Guy
in Toriko the Troll Kongs were said to not taste good.
As I finally reach my cave, I pull him out, not in the cave, as he is too big, but drop him outside and start cutting him apart. Hmm, I think I know just the part, the legs. The arms have too much muscle that would be too tough, but considering apes don't use their arms as much as other animals, their legs are softer and are the perfect shape, imma make ape legs. - Sevenfold9mthCommented
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Karin (who is leading when i made this) Vote Here - Sevenfold9mthCommented
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Karin (vote here) - Sevenfold1yrReplied to GlN
you should do Pomeranian that fits him
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he got $550k so he should have $250k left
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I'm definitely interested in time magic, illusion magic might be good too.
"Magic? So I'm physically growing horns, spiritually have a sword in my soul and now I might have a chance to learn magic? What am I going to become a empath next as well? I guess I'll add it to the pile..." Izuku stared at the ceiling blankly once more. - Sevenfold1yrCommented
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Kill Enel and give his devil fruit to someone else, like Nami for example. [Vote here:]