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PleasantPresent2yrCommentedCh 69 Night of the hungry wolves - start- PleasantPresent3yrCommented
i approve 👍
"Just send a demi- wait. It seems you gotta go and retrieve this prophecy." This was a rare occurrence, usually it was the gods giving prophecies not receiving, though I was not upset about it as I had hoped it would bring me closer to my Percy, yes my Percy, I will fight the Athena spawn for him if I must. - PleasantPresent3yrCommentedThis chapter has been deleted.
- PleasantPresent3yrReplied to LasciviousPersonality: evil (you're really evil)
- PleasantPresent3yrCommentedAnd most importantly, the Imperium always finishes what it started.
- PleasantPresent3yrCommentedSometimes, tutorial bot is kind of an asshole when it comes to his, uh, "life advices". Most of the time, these "life advice" of his just becomes downright horrifying to depict. A year ago, he once said to me that to become stronger easily, I'll have to sacrifice 10 orphans to the Blood God… he even said it in a voice full of seriousness, there were no rooms for jokes there.
- PleasantPresent3yrCommented
I realy like how you changed it
This chapter has been deleted.detailplease reset the booktitle JustS_RandomWriter 20231218092329 43Anime & Comics · JustS_RandomWriter - PleasantPresent3yrCommented
I think a rewrite would be better and you can probably get more readers with a new book.
This chapter has been deleted.detailplease reset the booktitle JustS_RandomWriter 20231218092329 43Anime & Comics · JustS_RandomWriter - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to DaoOfGayRegardless of how he did this... A LOT of revenge is in order. I'm sure she's not going to have anything against that.
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This fells like Warhammer 40k mixed with dnd and I love that👍
This chapter has been deleted. - PleasantPresent3yrCommentedUnfortunately, Styxx was born during a very trying time, the Ottomans ruled Greece, and whispers of war were spreading through the empire, but luckily their town was relatively peaceful, and kept to themselves. When Styxx turned four, tragedy struck the loving family of three. War had broken out and his family was forced to give almost all their cattle and wheat for the war effort. Styxx's father was not forced to join as he had once taken an arrow to the knee when he had served as a young man, hindering his ability to walk, and therefore fight.
- PleasantPresent3yrCommented
You can manipulate more than just metal with it but okay. For example you can manipulate water with magnetic fields. (I recommend watching a video on YouTube about that since its pretty cool)
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I don't know much about the contract but quite a few people have said they aren't great. The decision lies with you bit if you decide to sign the contract than do so after reading it carefully. And of course I would continue to read. P.S Take your time to decide about the contract and to mourn.
Ch 35 MoC 33 - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to easyread
I did that because I believed I am helping people, and quite a few have appreciated it (and the others ignore it), so there never was a problem with it. Now about the writer part, how the F can one profile say anything about other websites, multiple accounts, and things I have written on paper? Also, please stop saying things about me personally, you don't know me, and I am doing you the same favor. (And I won't comment anything else on your story, so don't worry)
[Sentinel Guard Lvl. 15 Elite] - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to easyread
And just because you mentioned the pov thing, I asked you to write in third person if you weren't writing about the mc, or announcing it with [pov pope] or something as an alternative if you couldn't.
[Sentinel Guard Lvl. 15 Elite] - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to
Okay so I liked your story but thought that I could maybe help you improve so I pointed it out rather bluntly.You calling me out on that, okay. You not answering my previous comment, okay. But challenging me to do stuff and assuming things about me? Not okay! But lets get back to my other comment to which you changed the topping to after I expressed that I wanted to help. I believe that writing one paragraph with he instead of I is doable. Now me mentioning it shouldn't cause such an extreme reaction of yours because, as I told you before, this is your story, do whatever. You can acknowledge my intend to help(by pointing out things to improve like in school or work) or you can ignore them but going ballistic on me is just not okay no matter how much I liked your story or how much work you put in. (And yes I once wrote a story so I know how much work and how complicated it is)
[Sentinel Guard Lvl. 15 Elite] - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to easyread
I intended to point out your mistakes so that you could improve but I guess that could be seen as rude and complaining. And do with my comments whatever you want its your story not mine.(and i hope that you take them to heart because a simple sentence to describe scenes and appearances makes, in my opinion, stories more enjoyable)
[Sentinel Guard Lvl. 15 Elite] - PleasantPresent3yrCommented
No matter what gender/sexuality another person has I would mind being naked in front of a stranger.
- What's the big deal? You don't seem upset about his death, he was a bastard, everyone knows that. I'm sure you wouldn't mind killing him yourself if you could. Well, about your body...- I looked around at her and smiled: - You're still fully dressed, so don't get mad. plus, i heard you're a lesbian, so it shouldn't be a problem for you.- - PleasantPresent3yrReplied to Geee
I think it is more likely the other demon lord since the dragon queen wouldn't call her daughter like that.
???: "MY GREETINGS TO ALL YOU BUGS, ALLOW ME TO INTRODUCE MYSELF" - PleasantPresent3yrCommented
I haven't read your other novel but this is pretty decent so yes please continue writing.
I decided that I'll make this novel as past tense because it's easier to write. I'll edit the earlier chapters so that new readers will not be confuse. I'm updating this series six times a week... I'm an amateur but please support me.)