GinOokami

So it is AI assited. I was wondering why 3+ writers I've found have the same style of writing dialogues. Your story in particular gave me whiplashes sometimes, like 2 people are writing the same story. Although it bothers me a little, I guess it's something I (or rather some of us) needs to get used to, seeing that there isn't much "original content" in WN's fanfic section. I understand that a lot of people want to write their own fanfictions, but have personal limitations and AI is a very accessible thing to have to help avoid said limitations to achieve what they want. I don't fault you (or anyone else for that matter) for that. Though, I do hope someday you can confidently write on your own, because you're making something genuinely entertaining

I was curious about author's original work after coming from MHA fanfic. Apparently, despite the name of the novel, I didn't expect the R18 part happened that fast. Not a complaint, just something that was unexpected. So far, the MC's journey seems to be heavily inspired by Solo Leveling, which was what the author already said. This is also the second (or third?) time I've read a system novel where the heroines could benefit from the system function. Which is a bit weird, as there are many system-type novels out there, but those MCs will most likely take their system secret to the grave. I quite enjoy the writing style of this author. I can't explain why exactly, but it seems a bit more... coherent? fluent? directed? Anyway, I also like how author writes their R18 scenes. They are more action than just the regular old character dialogues and reactions, which is how R18 should be written. You'll probably understand it once you read them yourself. I can't really comment on update stability, as my current reading progress ended on a chapter from 10 days ago. But from what I've seen, it's great. My verdict: I recommend this novel very much. I think this is pretty much my second original work where I willingly paid for coins just so I can read more of it. I don't really like spending money on this platform, but I don't think there are other places so...

Oh, I wonder why this didn't cross my mind until today. I honestly thought the unalloyed needle was for Millicent and Malenia only, until Maliketh and him suggesting to kill a dragon reminded me of something. This is just me assuming things though. I understand Marika tolerating Dragon Communion, but Frenzy?

You could always make a separate chapter for spicier stuff to let people that do not enjoy R18 to skip it, or just put a "tag" when that stuff starts and ends. This'll allow you to experiment a bit and isolate actual advice on writing R18 parts without needlessly having to frustrate yourself over people commenting that they do not enjoy reading them. Having said that, some people will consciously ignore R18 warning, keep reading it, and complain like an idiot

Wtf? Am I tripping, or is this chapter just an excuse for a word count? You already stated about that clocking tech shit in the previous chapter, but you did it again in the middle of this one. And the second half of this is just a repeat of the first half.

With how Dutch's mind still went downhill in this fanfic, I'm excited to see how you'll go about it. I honestly kinda hope that he doesn't reform and just went even further into the abyss than the original game. Thanks for the chap

Small preamble. I would like to say thank you to the author for simply writing fanfics. The state of fanfics currently in webnovel is atrocious. So many translation bullshit that I'd rather not touch with a ten foot pole. I know translating things, especially stories, require time and hard work, but its just not the same. Anyway, to the actual review. I like how this particular author writes her stuff, it's easy to read and no hard words that needed google searches every 3 minutes. This counts for Limitless and her other MHA fanfic, which I forgot the title name (sorry about that). The story development is pretty good. The early training arc wasn't prolonged to hell and back, which I appreciate, but it really doesn't do anything. I don't know how to explain it better than "justification" for certain things, like MC having a good build, early morning training, and powerful combat abilities. To be fair, that is what training arc is supposed to do, to justify things, to allow authors leeway for MCs to do some incredible stuff (physical or magical). But at the end of the day, the quirk takes the spotlight the most, which is fitting cuz its MHA and the limitless technique is bullshit like that. Not to mention this "X factor" that was mentioned once and never again. Well, it honestly doesn't matter that much. Too much tangent, sorry. Anyway, I have no other issues with story development... Actually, I do, let's pause it for later. I have no issues with update stability, seeing as I'm currently binge reading this fanfic. Character design... lets see... the background information for MC in chapter 1 did jack shit. It only states that MC was once a hitman...and that's it. That hitman experience of his is forgotten entirely. It doesn't get incorporated into MC's character. This irks me even more after the USJ incident. I'll get to that later. The world background doesn't really have anything to mention, not good nor bad. Its just MHA with small AU stuff here and there because of creative liberty. Overall, a good fanfic to read and follow. Hopefully there is an end, because it'll be unfortunate if the author just stops midway like Act-Age. Anyway, a rant. It's not important to the review, but I guess I want to do this because it is a bit relevant to the story. It was foreshadowed that Jane could be related to something from the other side of the heroes spectrum, with the source material for her being a double agent and all. But for fuck sake, I really don't like that there is some chance of her actually "betraying" MC. To be fair, that whole stuff could just be spice to add, some drama to be cooked for later, and could reveal that love does prevail in the end. But I just don't like any small chance of betrayal occuring. Granted, this could just be a personal baggage that I'm superimposing with the story, but it makes it really fucking hard for me to continue reading. Don't get me wrong, I like drama. I can stomach misunderstandings. But betrayal, even only a small chance of it actually happening, is something that just grind my gears a little too hard. Well, it was something that already happened in the story, so I'll most likely avoid reading this fanfic until either more chapters (like 100+ or something) have been posted, or I forgot that small plot point and is bored with nothing to do. I will, however, continue reading and supporting your other MHA work, cuz that shit is sublime

Wow, what a good-hearted author

He is a Fool, after all.