Divne

how does she know? I though they forgot everything when the fight ended.

Nope, he is saying she was pretty, past tense.

to ever "live" not "leave"

Loreina doesn't know valyrs name, should be Ylvar here!

Hi TrueDawn, first I want to say that I enjoy the story. the character of valyr was indeed strange at the start but I think it was still ok and it is getting better. One thing I want to suggest that would improve the writing massively is to avoid redundancy. Often, as I am reading, it fells like the dame information is being written just in different ways. for instance you have some lines of dialogue along with a text version of the dialogue. For example, you would write(not from the novel): "Hey Valyr, how about forging a weapon for me?" said Damien, asking valyr if he wanted to forge a weapon. "No, I do not have the time", answered valyr, explaining that he did not have enough time to forge today. Hopefully, you understand what I mean.

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

Thanks for the chapter. Now go and enjoy the holidays [img=recommend]