Can't even finish read the 1st chapter. Badly need an editor to improve choices of words use in writing and in constructing the sentences to make it more comprehensible.

i like the story line but you seriously need a good editor to do major sentence restructuring: grammars editing and proper vocabulary use in the sentence. Kudos to the author for trying though. Once this story goes thru proper editing, it would be a great read.

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