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This bounty section does not make sense to me. I am definitely taking this too seriously and this your story after all, but maybe you can answer are what I believe are plot holes. -One: Vergo is the type to report all significant decisions that could expose his traitor status to Doflomingo first. Dofi would definitely not risk his high valued spy for a mink. I believe Dofi would still setup the slave traders through his connections, but pay some corrupt expendable marines to report the bounty. -Two: Alyssia ship is unique with her “Explorer” labeled on it, and the ship’s shape mathching Kuja pirates. These characteristics would be marked down if docked officially at a marine base. Which can be easily back tracked to Kano. -Three:Yes the temptation of what the G5 base could offer Alyssia is excellent, but she should know better than getting close the a observation haki expert who is tied to doflomingo. Then expect to get a away scot free, when messing with Dofi’s plans of eternal wars to sell more weapons in the west blue. She should of know that minimum risk for these skills was getting a bounty. But, blissful ignorance and trust in her strength can make her think otherwise I guess. Lastly, fighting skill are excellent in to improve your fighting capabilities against similar or slightly stronger individuals. I might if missed in your story that has explained why, but it make no sense not to attempt to train armentment haki or observation haki by now since unlocking conquers. Isn’t her goal is to become the strongest right? Yes, it would make Alyssia too OP at this point in the story making it hard to write an interesting story. In the end, Alyssia should know that the strongest in the world are relying on broken devil fruit abilities and/or who’s will is stronger. Otherwise, CP9 should have taken down Luffy and his crew with their superior fighting skills.
Other than resources and an elven teacher, why doesn’t Diana just leave the Augustride family? She obviously dislikes her teacher and mother, and it seems like she can train herself at this point. So, what’s the point of the dealing the trouble.
I am surprised Jiraiya would still support fourth hokage Ryan after killing his teacher who Jiraiya staunchly supported. Slept with tsunade, and starting wars with neighbors which Jiraiya would venomously argue against doing. Promoting world peace is his dream after all.
Is the fates controlling Apollo’s current actions? He already destroyed the timeline. I don’t see how admending it now will bring much benefit other than delaying the confrontation with Zues. As for Promeatheus, he only tried to stop Pandora. He didn’t even succeed. How is that worth the punishment equilivent to stealing fire to give to the humans?
Where is mother earth on this list?
Does shade truely believe he can pull through against Voldemort alone? Might as well hog tie himself and offer himself at voldemort’s door step. Tom is preparing himself for dumbledore to come through the door, and now he can use shade to make dumbledore offer himself without a fight. It’s like shade got more delusional as he grew older. The only reasons he succeeded so far was foreknowledge. How shade cannot see that he needs help with this is painful to read.
This makes me think that a rival family to the Prince family made a contract using Eileen’s blood. Making her fall in love with a muggle. Probably dumbledore was the culprit.
“Three persons” I think person is always meant for single individual, and can’t be pluralized. People, is meant for more than one person. “Three people” or “three humans” would work instead, but the former sound more sane.
She didn’t say anything bad about a Ron Weasley. That is a surprise.
Does Leo not realize the last item of making her dream come true is basically a slave contract to him? Her dream could be extremely detailed and constantly change, and he has to fulfill it. She could say that my dream is living in the captian’s cabin why on the adventure, while having all crew members wait on my beck and call.
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What’s wrong with the truth? I angered some rich bozo, and I have purchase a new house at J. Let’s move for our safety.
You said she was one year old in the beginning of this chapter. Now she is eight years old?
I didn’t know Wang had foals. He probably should set some goals to raise the foals well.
Farther down talks about the fruit giving the user more capability to gain physical strength faster. So, it allows the joined people access to more strength to use the devil fruits. I am just prestigious against this fruit.
I just don’t see how that this would make them significantly more powerful. Yes, carina would get amazing swordsmanship and the ability to use the flame fruit. Other than having carina amazing brain to control the abilities, nami and kuina will be just as strong separately and not limited to one body. This just gives the ability allow carina defend herself if nami and kuina is willing go through this unnecessary process when they can defet the enemies themselves. There is way better devil fruits out there like the logia thunder fruit if it hasn’t been eaten yet.
Didn’t the mc not want trouble? Destroying shield would me that all evil villains would need to be delt with by the mc. It like stating, “I only like women” then makes love with a man the next moment.
You can do that with a billion dollars. No more money would be needed. Didn’t the Aurthor state that was how much he made in the beginning?