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Hello. I was originally reading this on scribblehub, and when going through my bookmarks, I noticed that it, and your account entirely, was deleted? What happened?
Yeahhhh.
This is... Good? Like, actually? It's a supremely strange concept, but I've really enjoyed reading it. I honestly can't think of any flaws this has in particular. I hope for more.
The first sentence has a blatant error. Of the sort that's constantly repeated. The author doesn't bother to check what they wrote. If you're okay with that, then you can try it. Personally, I can't stand such a low standard of effort.
You're. You should at-least try with these things.
You have some serious problems with were's, we'res, and wheres.
Wow. An error on the literal first sentence. That's impressive.
Honestly. I really like this. It's written really well, all things considered. It's got many issues in it's writing, but it feels good, and in all ways that matter, that's the most important thing. However. The story. Honestly, it feels like random things just... Happen. There's absolutely no sense of causation. Things just... Happen as the Author wills it. The further into this you get, the worse it gets. Honestly, it's unbearable. Don't read this. The characters are great. The writing quality is a diamond in the rough. But the story is awful.
cheese. I like cheese pizza. And I don't hate pineapple on pizza, but it's not really pizza at that point.