Lucifer_Anima

only in America, if you come to Europe it goes from 18 years old and up and even then not many places check the age

First of all, I have to say that as I'm writing this review, I'm on chapter 6. The story is nice and all. But it feels very much like a rough draft. I'd advise the author to revise the chapters and try to better explain what happens at the beginning of the story because it's very confusing, it slows down the pace of the story and makes the characters interact properly. As I said, it feels like a rough draft of a good idea, but still a rough draft, something unfinished, not a finished product. As for the sex scene, I have to say that you wrote it poorly. It's better if you let it be known but don't write it.

You translated the chapter badly, you got all the character names wrong

a nice book to read all in one breath, it's a very nice AU Naruto, with a much more powerful power system, the protagonist has a system, and the female protagonist is a regressor.

if you want to know more just look at Naruto or the Wiki

basically what i want to say is that if madara is still alive both sasuke and naruto cant be born with their distinct characteristics yet

reincarnation of the chakra, but as reincarnation the first host must die to pass to the next one, in addition to that the chakra of indra and asura when they die wait for the other to die too to reincarnate shortly after together with a maximum difference of a few months.

author, it doesn't make sense for Madara and Sasuke to exist at the same time because Sasuke is the next reincarnation of Indra's chakra and then he should have died shortly before his birth.

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