ah that's true XD i write it with my shallow knowledge. I thought it was for "Enemies" i searched and found out that the correct meaning is for "Environment" so, "Entity" will also do thanks XD

uhh.. thanks a lot TT it gives me more motivation to improve and learn.

ah i see. i know how bad my grammar is and i even cringe when i read it XD that's why people who gave me pointer are somehow like a savior to me XD but still, it's quite a shock when the pointer come insistently XD thanks ^^ (your interaction means a lot TT)

sorry for the inconvenient. this paragraph here is a mistake, but i want to keep it as it is, so the correction from the account named PaulThePerson (the same person as Splashy101 who left a review on the front page) will still be there and i can read it in the future. this is precious for me since someone finally wants to waste their time and give me constructive feedback. so, please forgive my selfishness ^^

ah, is that so? thanks XD (although i don't know why people give correction a lot (recently) on this novel) it's not happened a while back and it feels weird to only receive this correction just recently. are the people that read and give me power stone back then just accept the writing as it is, they ignored it, or they don't have the capability as much as yours. sorry, i'm just curious XD and thanks once again XD

the weird thing is that it's already fixed on Grammarly. with no red and yellow error. letme check it manually later. since you said about all tenses messed up and grammarly, i hope this is not an empty comment. thanks XD

i see. so, it should be largest and most ambitious. thanks a lot and sorry, if i edit the paragraph, your comment will be deleted automatically. so, i might keep the paragraph as it is (and people can read the correct sentence) or edit it (and deleted my mistake). well anyway, thanks a lot for the pointer XD

ah i see. i think i got what you mean. it's about the entire novel (included dialogue). thanks a lot about the feedback XD and I will improve my grammar (i know i am bad at it, and your pointer means a lot and really helpful)

ah, and i'll sticky it. so, if anyone read this and want to help (to answer), feel free to do so. thanks XD

some comment about technical issues (mainly grammar) hit me quite hard and i am an ******* too. i am a bit scared to update more chapters, but i will try it again. thanks for the words. it's motivating me and means a lot. once again, thanks TT

can you elaborate on it? what does it mean by 'i should avoid talking in the past tense when i write novel?' i am an ******* and want to keep learning. but, the contradictory of 'it's better to write a novel in a past tense' (advice from the forum and my professor) and your comment makes me confused. i know the switching between tenses and that's my mistake to let it through. thanks a lot XD (furthermore, if you answer. since most of the critiques never reply.)

[Author here] ah anyway, I planned to edit all the chapters with a proofreader. So, tell me if I should lower my expectation of the readers and put names for most parts of the conversation. (you know, I thought that was insulting if I did that (put names in a two-way conversation)) So, please guide me :) thanks a lot for the advice

really? viro initiated the talk and arie calmly on the winning side? even the narrative has explained how viro was frustrated. Is that hard? Thanks, though :). I guess I should lower my expectation of the reader, then.

and that's the purpose

I just take a reference from a novel I bought, and decided to use it. In some part oh her novel, she put this kind of approach and I thought it looks cool. Thanks for the suggestion, I will try to review it again. :)

can I use it as a boss or character name? Since I have my own pattern for the places. Thanks for suggesting :)

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

well, it's unfortunate TT and I also signed a contract with this title that means I have to go on and improve more with this story. that's why I really appreciate your comment. once again, thanks a lot [img=update]

thanks a lot XDD I knew about the too much information in earlier chapter but unfortunately I don't know how to fix it TT at that time, I only want to share the game background as much as possible TT

Thanks a lot for leaving comments on my chapter :). And sorry for the past few days since I got a high fever and can't write chapter (TT). Thanks a lot, your comments really give me motivation to continue the story.