feyfell
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2019-01-02 JoinedUnited States
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feyfell3 years agoCommentedif he gained 2 levels the first time it exploded, he should be level 5 now not 4
- feyfell4 years agoCommented
That's a lot of variations of "check" in two sentences. Please don't take offense as I am enjoying the story very much, but I've noticed a lot of repetition. Mainly over emphasizing details which could have done with less.
- feyfell4 years agoReplied to ProdaG
nope.
- feyfell4 years agoCommented
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon
- feyfell4 years agoCommented
the second "calmly" is redundant.
