jomone
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jomone1yrCommentedhey I like your story idea and all but the grammar is really bad. and you keep changing the mc name and shino gender alot. also you have many mistakes and it makes it extremely hard to read and follow the story, I have only read this far because I haved hope it would get better. I hope you don't completely drop the story, but for you to go back through it and fix the mistakes or find some to do it for you. I truly hope to one day find this book fixed or another one made better then this one.
Ch 81 Chapter 81 : The Eighth and Tenth Class Actions- jomone1yrCommented
I hate you right now I just found this fan fic and it started so well but then you had to stop on a fucking cliff hanger. I am begging you please finish you story. I have read thousands up on thousands of books, short stories fanfics, comics and manga. But very few ever sucked me into the story enough for me to get mad at a gosh damn cliff hanger. So please finish the story, it's a good start and I believe you can make it into something great. just come back and finish the story
This book has been deleted. - jomone2yrCommented
I enjoy the story and hope you finish it if not then I hope you start over with a similar idea for a new story but with the changes you had in mind. I have read a few of your other fanfiction and enjoyed those as well. I hope you continue to write story for you have some talent in it.
Ch 94 The long awaited... Hiatus - jomone2yrCommented
I enjoy reading your fanfiction. was wonderful writing, once I started to read it I just couldn't stop. and I ask that you keep writing for your talent you showed in writing is great. so please keep writing and don't drop like most people. I haven't read a fanfiction this well written in a really long time and I wish to see where you will go with this story.
Ch 46 Ch. 15 Loyalty - jomone2yrCommented
I like the idea of the story but I feel like you should put less author notes in.
remember everyone if I dont know where you want the story to go I cant stear it that way and just so ya know the reason I went for Sinth and Amanda as main characters is mainly because I felt the mc needed people as soon as he got in as he wont have parents or there connections so I came up with two characters who will be great subordinates and then I made some random chars in my head and we ended up hear with me doing a coin flip and getting serf - jomone2yrCommentedCh 2 Hey again, it's me.