i feel the team way overreacted to the mc being here considering batman was in the room with him showing batman was cool with him . even as paranoid as they get latter on does not really seem to be in character

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were people really complaining? i personally like the pacing and don't like stories where they make there oc so op that as a ten year old they take on armies. actually my only complaint is that we have not seen more training in stuff like learning force powers. though can understand cause for the most part you would have to make up how that training works since the force is never described in depth how you train and gain powers other then the basics

nice to see the mc acting smart instead since he knows this world follows more real world logic in some areas unlike the games and anime. though i wonder how he is going to grow if he avoids all the trainers by teleporting. he needs more real combat experience and team coordination if he wants to take on the gyms. though i guess unlike the games he can not just spray potion on them and fix every injury they would get from repeat battles. maybe he can learn to use the fairy move floral healing to help his team. and moonlight if he gets hurt himself. or catch a pokemon that can help with keeping his team healthy

the martial arts one. where if you win you get a riolu. the one where he will face Maylene one on one. i dont mean a pokemon tournament ether just martial arts

have you thought of looking around to see if you can find a fan to edit the story. i know on ao3 a lot of authors have fans that help edit stuff. would make it easier for people to get into the story

the premise of the story itself is fine and the auther knows dc well enough that i don't think we will get glaring problems of not knowing what character can do what. the thing holding this back is its hard to understand. i get the general idea but its obvious the writter does not know how to write english very well. putting words in orders that are redundant. an example of the kind of the worst of it is ''he knows this cause he knows this'' where the sentence repeats itself and pronouns are often mixed op a he is referred to as a she than a he again in like 4 sentences. weirdly enough most everything is spelled correctly. i feel like if they could get a fan who knows english to help edit the story it would raise in quality to 4.5 or 5 stars

its only been a week or so since i started to read this but man this is an addicting story

I am glad to see our mc will try to train his fairy traits. psychic fighting and ghost type trainers seem to be the ones with the more obvious effects from strengthening there type so i am curious what you will have him strengthening his fairy aspect will have. only example i can think of is Valerie and her eyes. i know fairy makes you more likable(unless you are greeting a dragon) wonder if strengthening his fairy aspects will affect his innate charm. also i know you said ash is fairy type but wonder if they are duel with fighting type with his aura ability's we rarely see and his love of battle and battle smarts.

gyms. it cut that word off for some reason

i don't mind honestly. its better to make the story have a better timeline and fix things that don't make sense early on then to let them build up and make the story worse. was honestly wondering how he would with 5 years to work on his team with 2 strong starter pokemon. one a top contender on both psychic lines and fairy lines which he could make an apex pokemon on his own and one of the psudo legandary line how he would not just breeze through the first 3 or 4 gyms.

man this chapter added some extra depth for the mc. he will probably feel guilt for what he did for a good while. and dreepy fearing him maybe flinching or such in some interactions will make the mc feel regret going the fear angel. cause after all he was told to earn respect but instead of earning it the hard way of proving he deserves it he went with the short cut of respect through fear

honestly like the way you write relashinships. at least its better then the majority on here that think mass harems are the way to go and significant others are things to be won. in my opinion those stories are not enjoyable as to me harems have a massive problem there will always be a favorite and least favorite and that is not fair to anyone. also if they have kids chances are the dad would care about his favorites kids more then his least favorites which is just awful. while even the best parents have a favorite even if they don't want too and feel guilt about it and will never say it this just magnifies the problem

i wonder with him not being able to absorb all the orbs how many he has managed to stockpile

man with all the good deeds mc is doing and how many they will need to do to keep leveling i wonder what freya's reaction(or any god that can see soul's) will be when they see her soul

i figured he could figure out his own version of it that resolves around mysteries instead of thaumaturgy since mysteries based magic in the age of gods is supposed to be more powerful since they are not constrained by what modern humans think is possible. that and the much higher levels of magic energy in the world. he could probably make a quiver that does it later on when he gets better at it

i mean he watched the fate series and with his eyes he could probably use projection and tracing like Shirou Emiya with enough experimentation and just custom make one super good unique arrow then use trace along with his eyes ability to understand anything he sees to just make more with magic. so he could have near limitless(based on how much magic he has at any given point) high quality arrows. and the spinning thing can be done with both cheap and high quality arrows

if charon could make an arrow spin maybe Ikares can make his arrows spin super fast on firing for extra damage. probably even shape the head of the arrow to make the process more effective. the bow is already powerful if he made more powerful arrows out of good materials and have the arrow rapidly spin he could have the arrows burrow deep into the boars flesh when he faces it in the future

actually recently kubo stated hollows could have kids. whether he just meant aarancar since they are part shikigami who can have kids or hollows in general i have no idea

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