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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
Not to be crass but that definitely wasn't a distant approach...
love the story so far. I feel the descriptive words could be more..dynamic? the sentences seem a bit stilted to me. example: "he then turned" could be changed to simply "he turned" or throw in a description like "slowly, timidly, etc" instead