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I'm confused is he just insane and has a split personality? There was no distinction between what it was he was talking with or if it was a another thing or personality he was talking to. It was just a bunch of "" no distinction between Everett or w.e else it was. It was just a giant text wall of Everett talking to himself it looked like
Idk if this is a translation or not.. but if it is no worries. If it isn't then Nobody in the situation for the Delinquent boy would talk like that.. "I will change my ways for the better" he would be resigned to death.. beg for help/he doesn't want to die.. or say thank you normally. Idk food for thought I guess.
Why does the word Kindness keep popping up. Holy shit you need to edit its so disrespectful to your readers.