Venerable_Linfeng
My pen-name is Venerable Linfeng. I write random genres novels. Fav Genres:Martial Arts, Action, Magic, Game,WuXia, Fan-Fiction, Xianxia, System etc
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All right, your fellow writer here! This is the second review and serious review. Here are the reasons why I gave this book 3 stars: 1. Writing Quality: Everything in here is indeed readable and understandable, but it is not in the right way. Since you use 3rd person narration as your writing style, make sure that everything is in the past tense. It’s true that everything is readable, but some readers still prefer or pursue the perfect writing style where grammars are fit to read instead. If you have time, be sure to edit them seriously. Punctuation, glaringly wrong grammar, typos, unusual phrase, etc,. 2. Updating Stability: In this period of time, the schedule is 0ch/week, but I gave 3 stars hoping the author will be able to change it and make it stable in the future. 3. Story Development: The pacing is not stable at all! Don’t move from one scene to another too quickly or too slowly. If things have to be skipped, be sure to express it down, don’t write a random and unnecessary scene. Don’t end a scene unclearly. Don’t add info dump.(eg. don’t introduce unnecessary characters) But note that info dump is still necessary, just don’t add too much in one chapter. 4. Character Design: If you have your own unique protagonist, that would be the best. I’ve seen too much typical protagonists nowadays now. Also, introduce your MC a bit more clearly, because it’s hard to distinguish who is your MC if one only reads roughly instead of thoroughly. I gave 2 stars because I saw quite a bunch of typical characters in here. 5. World Background: If your story is Western-Fantasy based, don’t mix in the “Sensei” or similar Japanese stuff, only use the Westerners’ words. I gave 3 stars because it’s a fantasy world, a world where it’s big enough that anything can happen and exist. That’s all for my rough review which can be counted as initial step for improvements for your book. ✌️✌️✌️
Thank you for your reminder and sorry for that, it was actually an idiom. It means, he already has a few enemies blocking him, so what if another troublemaker comes? He still did not them in his eyes the slightest bit. But since I was lazy to explain, I edited this dialogue to a simpler term now.
Ahem, this is author's traditional and sacred habit of reviewing my own book. I don't really have much to say here. This novel is a bit cliche initially, and each chapter might be a bit long(prob around 1500-2000 words), but further down, I will try my best to live up to your expectation. The MC is a bit cold since he was originally a demon or still-to-be a demon in his second life, but he is not that cold-blooded/ruthless nor loves to kill. I hope that this story will give you some unexpected twist of plot at some points. Don't read this anymore, just go to read the main thing now!!!!
I kept the (shameless) tradition of rating author's own book a full 5 stars. This book will be updated daily after it becomes stable, I hope our fellow "book-friends" and my readers from the previous books like this new novel which has a completely new taste. Constructive criticisms/reviews are welcomed with both hands, while unreasonable and abusive reviews will be deleted.