SpaceOrbisStories
I'm a 34-year-old gamer who enjoys making stories from time to time.
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SpaceOrbisStoriesa year agoReplied to Mori_sofosSorry for the lack of any new chapters. Just haven't had the time to really got any work done on it. But some work has been done it's just not at a state that I feel is worthy of posting. Thanks for the review though it means a lot :)
- SpaceOrbisStoriesa year agoReplied to Mysticwolf
I never really thought about him having a snake but given how he can talk to them the idea is worth adding to the story. I thank you for the idea. Not sure when or if I would add it but I'll keep that in mind moving forward.
- SpaceOrbisStoriesa year agoReplied to Mysticwolf
Truth be told up until I started to look past the easy shipping with him a few years ago Pansy was easily the one I liked the best. My logic with this is her family and his are some of the oldest and so once he reentered their world her folks just made their move. Plus I'm not keen on her and Malfoy. They are friends of course but I don't see them moving past that at all.
- SpaceOrbisStories4 years agoReplied to Snoax
No worth story should need more than a few chapters to get a reader to want to read more. I could have waited until I was ten chapters deep but still the core is still there. No risk. Part of a good story is the growth. There can be none here when the MC is so overpowered and god level.
- SpaceOrbisStories4 years agoPosted
Ok, so this is my review after reading the first seven chapters which I feel is enough to have some idea of this story. As somebody who has read a few stories like this, I can say I don't feel like this is anything special. The :hero: is so overpowered that there is no risk at all. Everything so far is on easy mode and I don't see anything being able to put him at risk. This is just bad storytelling and it has no right being pushed as anything worth reading. My review is in part in the hope that later chapters make up for this fairly weak start. But upon reading other reviews I feel a three is a good score for this. It could be fun but only if you haven't read stories like it before. Otherwise it may be better if you read something else.
- SpaceOrbisStories4 years agoCommented
I think the word you're looking for is tone. Toon is another way to say cartoon and I'm fairly sure you're not talking about a cartoon.
- SpaceOrbisStories4 years agoPosted
First off I read this story a few weeks ago and forgot what it was called and was really bummed out because it was a fairly good read. So to find it here out of the blue makes me very happy. Ok enough of that nonsense on to the review itself. For a story of over 600 chapters, I have only read up to maybe chapter eight. So most of this story is utterly unknown to me. But what I have read is great. I enjoy the storytelling, the way the wider world is covered, and really everything about it. As somebody who only found this type of storytelling this year it is easily a must read if you're into stories with game mechanics.
- SpaceOrbisStories4 years agoReplied to MrYamcha
I'm happy you like the story so far. I do have a few chapters that I have worked on that don't necessarily continue the main story but could act as a sort of fuller so as to allow me time to make the next proper chapter. They cover Bura's timeline. So if anybody seems to like that idea I could start posting those on here.
