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"and she couldn't" here 'she' should be 'he'
add between still 'have' nine years
also 'take' should be 'took'
here 'I' should be 'he'
'he' should be 'I'
took me years' here 'me' should be 'him'
I' here should be 'he'
here 'he' should be 'she'
Children should be 'eyes'.
here 'I' into 'he' 'you' into 'he' 'man' into 'girl'
Both 'I' should be change into 'she' and 'my' into her
Author-san the is good but there are lot of mistakes and Siriously I don't want this good story to become spoiler because crude writing so If you haven't found anyone to edit your work reply to me and I will the editing .. I am also writer so I have also made mistakes I can't garantee thorough editing like article or complex grammer . but I will be enough to read without problem...
'him' change into 'her'
change 'him' into 'her'
change 'he' into 'she'
below this fifth paragraph have also same change
Again here 'I' change it into 'he'
'beautiful home' add 'Girl' in between that.
here again 'I' should be changed into 'he'