MRgold1
I'm a guy who's new to writing and has a few idea's for stories and I hope that over time I get better at writing/stories ideas and will be able to get a good community who read my story's .
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yeah, but I guess they're evil because there are those who aren't religious who don't attack those who are. while those seen as evil actively destroy and ruin everything they can.
New race without any skills or time to evolve and get stronger and is similar to human life spans of the time before modern medicine.
yeah, I see that aswell but they can have red,white,black,green, and other coloured skins. The only thing I have in my head for them is a mix of human and predator and maybe some lizard men or avatar look.
This seems confusing as if I took away what you say makes them one dimensional they'd be even more one-dimensional. The basic traits people have are their nationality and race, along with their gender and religion. Also, you must not be reading correctly as the mc Jack isn't American he's British and if you've read my work so far you would see I've littered around the chapters how Jack is far from a nationalist in fact I made an entire chapter talking about these things. I've also already spoken about how I'm trying my best to focus on Jack while having group chapters on the other characters as they play important roles later on where they will be more involved. As for the other characters, they're not meant to all be saints with no sins, and Jack isn't perfect, constantly doubting himself and his self-worth while also overthinking his actions. I understand my novel won't be for everyone, and some will say it can be done better, but most of what you're saying just doesn't make sense as if If wrote them your way it would just be their likes and dislikes that gets boring quickly. I hope you give it a re-read, but if not, thanks for your time.
Nah, it's alright. You have the Jackrixis that are the main race , and each candidate has 2 minor races. For Jack, because he's in an alliance with Nancy, he has control over her race, and in return, if he wins, she doesn't die.
yeah it's only for the game
Possibly, but more likely no, and the reason is something secret, but its the reason the game exists.
yeah, there meant to be the dynamite you throw at a problem unless they're political leaders or scholars. they won't be around for long they're just unstable.
no, that's correct, but as it says that there are negatives to with living so long.
the game just makes it impossible to go past it, so with magic, you can't grow or learn any more there's an invisible wall. As for technology its along the lines of it not working or the game rewriting memories to keep them from thinking of more advanced tech.
fixed thanks, mate [img=recommend]