Your magical words dont work on me wizard, I'm too stupid.

Jordan is different than Katsuki, it's how maybe one might call a quirk that gives a small strengthening boost [Amp Up] or [Adrenaline Rush]. Its just a small thing to show how his thinking is and how his presence will slowly start to affect canon.

Also Lady Nagant with air walk and rifle.

My ankle monitor anytime I get five hundred feet within a school zone.

No matter what this review states, keep writing and getting better, we cant be perfect. -REVIEW- I will say that for the most part this is one, if not the best, beginning for an mha fanfic on the site. Good execution, no needless padding of words, nothing unnecessary, and it's actually believable. No butt pulls out of nowhere or simple "since im smart" moments where very important things are glossed over. Honestly, 9/10 for the childhood arc alone. However, that rating falls when we get to UA. I have never understood the reason why in most mha fanfics everyone has a hate boner for Midoriya. Yeah he is spineless, yes he did nothing to train to be a hero, yes he gets no bitches (lol). But for the love of god he is 14. I get tired of 20+ year olds or whatever talking down to a literal kid as if he was supposed to have his life figured out by 14. I wanted to be a fireman at that age, yet you didnt see me running through fire, carrying fake bodies, and studying chemistry. That makes the rating drop by a bit, because at this point it becomes a push and pull of "I hate Midoriya" to "I need to help him so he can help me later" to "no, this my own story, fuck him" to "he needs to mature faster if canon changes" to etc etc. It is exhausting, would rather you kill him and be done with it, or be his friend and dont be overly helpful to the point of Being a slave. Pick a side and stick with it. Next, I can see the cracks of the story appearing. You want to keep canon the same, but at the same time ellude to it changing, then have the MC do things to keep it the same. The second (spoiler) Chisaki was killed canon was scrapped, please dont make it a carbon copy of the source material, thousands of those already exist. It seems like After the childhood arc the story feels lost, no real direction, and not in a mysterious way either. Annoying if anything. However. I hope you continue to write, and this is coming from someone who writes mha fanfics and gave up because of how hard it was to make it work, so don't give up 👍🏽

That's the point

Two is the natural limit stated in the manga. Just how the past users of one for all could have one quirk plus the stockpiling one. However, it shortens their lifespan but they at least are not nomu like.

You may hav it mixed up(possibly from different cultures). There is next door neighbor, which means they are literally next door, and then just neighbors. People who live down the block from me are technically neighbors, just not next door.

I wonder how kicking him in the gut helps him control his quirk🤔

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Thank you, all the villains mc's just blend together and I cant remember a single one. The only goody two shoes MC's I usually see are honestly the best. Naruto, Luffy, Goku, etc. dont see why people say and think they dont work, because they do.

I 1000% plan to finish it but I have a horrible case of writers block. I was on a roll then covid hit and messed it up. I will finish the story but Im taking a break. Maybe in a month or so ill drop like 20 chapters to make up for it. Just kee it in your library

Hehe, in due time

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I'm Glad you are back bro. You motivated me to start my own MHA fanfic which is currently at five chapters. It crazy that now you come back, I will make sure to shout you out at the end of the chapter my friend!

Yes, only in single burst, equivalent to 8% of ONE FOR ALL.

Of course, it's just a conversation, you showed respect so I will. I will also take into account your concerns and see if I can make it more realistic.

It comes with a very steep price, and yes, there is thousands of instances where someone who has never lifted a weight or worked out can pull, push, and pick up more weight that even body builders can in moments of peril. Also, I wrote it very clearly that there is a significant drawback. If Kenshi uses it, he is out, and to put the power in a simple terms he was moving at about 8% of One for All. Deku uses that and is extremely fast to the point he can anticipate and dodge bullets, let alone anything above that. For regular bystanders he did practically just appear, but if any hero with any training had been there he would be able to see him no problem, these are just civilians after all. There are many articles, vidoes even, wnd documentaries on normal people exceeding human limits. A old woman lifting a car off her child to save her, a cop running faster than usian bolt from a propane explosion, a hiker anle to lift an 800 pound rock like a bench press when if fell on him. It is very realistic in a sense.

Once he takes away his sense of touch, he can exceed human limits because his mind isn't subconsciously putting a limiter on himself. He cant feel his body at all, so his mind can't technically micromanage such things. Hence he can push himself to super human feats but with a price.