For someone who just wrote her first novel, the story and plot that revolves around the FMC is well written. I have no fault with the grammars as it doesn't really matter to these kinds of story where you can just ignore it as the story is good. Hope you keep it up and don't lose your enthusiasm in writing.

this actually has potential to become great novel. the pacing is weird though. this must be his "first" novel he made. well why do I even comment like this when I myself ain't a great writer lol