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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    "she will meet" to "she met"

    June was confident in her looks. With black hair, fair skin and a sharp face with green eyes, she was called pretty by most people she will meet and she has been honing her acting skills since her teenage years.
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    My Hollywood System
    Movies · DreamThree
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    gourd would probably be a more context-appropriate container

    When the process finished Nie Li opened his eyes. He felt great if a bit thirsty. He took out some bottles of water to drink and looked around. Girls were looking at him astonished.
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    TDG: Reincarnated and transmigrated
    Book&Literature · DaoistDlL6M5
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    There's too many "year"s

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    TDG: Reincarnated and transmigrated
    Book&Literature · DaoistDlL6M5
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    "He lay on the bed..." => "He laid on the bed..."

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    TDG: Reincarnated and transmigrated
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    "What he should do about her?" => "What should he do about her?"

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    TDG: Reincarnated and transmigrated
    Book&Literature · DaoistDlL6M5
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    Most of them get Dragon spirit when they ascend in the draconic realm tho. Except for the qilin iirc.

    Ch -1 Demon Spirit Ideas
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    TDG: Reincarnated and transmigrated
    Book&Literature · DaoistDlL6M5
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    I don't get why you'd call it "Flexibility" then. Just call it "Gymnastics" if you want the skill to give the MC both flexibility and balance.

    For example, his flexibility skill was way better than he had imagined. Not like it makes him a natural gymnast, it also helped him maintain his balance at all times.
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    Marvel: A New Avenger
    Movies · Extra26
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    I don't think you know what "to that extent". You should use "consequently" instead.

    Hector laid back, "Honestly, I'm bored, son. Remember when I told you about space? I will go there, maybe find a way to bring advanced tech here and make America stronger, to that extent the world. Until I return, I want you to keep working on making sure the nations do not get too corrupt. I know without me it's inevitable, but you need to keep Senators and Representatives in your pocket for as long as you can."
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    Marvel: Mr. President [COMPLETE]
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    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    Couple means a single set of 2 people, "couples" imply 2 or more sets of 2 people so at least 4 people. Couple is the correct word to use. "The media loves talking about how the Vice President and Marilyn Monroe are the best couples of this era." Should instead be "The media loves talking about how the VP and Marilyn Monroe are this era's best couple."

    Kennedy was right now 60, it was still a pretty young age. "Haha, come here, boy. Did you take a wrong turn or something? I thought you'd never leave your wife's side. The media loves talking about how the Vice President and Marilyn Monroe are the best couples of this era."
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    Marvel: Mr. President [COMPLETE]
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
    Commented

    Maybe just remove the "FOR" in the "FOR HOW LONG WILL YOU RUN, BOY?" if you're still editing this story.

    "FOR HOW LONG WILL YOU RUN, BOY?" Bucky laughingly shouted towards him.
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    Marvel: Mr. President [COMPLETE]
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor1yr
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    Isn't there already a Ghost Rider in the MCU tho?

    Marvel Universe 69***, (A/N: MCU but with Mutants, Ghost Rider and other beings.]
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    Marvel: Mr. President [COMPLETE]
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  • DraconicEmperor
    DraconicEmperor3yr
    Commented

    "...can take of you..." to "...can take care of you" Just proofreading and nothing malicious. Love your work. :)

    "Each of you should make good use of this time to learn everything you need to know and have the minimum required strength to be able to survive the journey that will come after we leave the capital! Remember, while you might think I am strong and can take of you, it should be me that should rely on you as your employer. Prove to me that I did not make a mistake by taking you out of that black-hearted merchant's grasp!"
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    Edea: Hero Summoning Conspiracy
    Fantasy · Ruruci
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