"I quite being the villain" my ass, the MC just goes full psycho with no redeeming features, you wish he'd just die for good. Also he gets some random power that makes women retarded yandere around him. But the last straw was him finding about the fact that the heroines can hear his thoughts in the first few chapters, what's the fucking point of the whole setup then? It might as well be a generic OP psycho villain MC, there's nothing else there at this point. Quite literally no point in the initial setup since it all gets thrown out of the window. Fucking change the title.

Not be a rapist psychopath that's for sure. You guys can pretend that it's human nature to make yourselves feel better all you want but don't lump the rest of us normal people in with your deranged shit.

Huh, you should really give a little warning if you're planning to write yet another trashy psychopath rapist MC. By the summary I thought this was actually going into another direction tbh, but I guess the edgy kids that like trashy edgy rapists as their MC's are the loudest. Either way, please tag it properly and put a nice warning somewhere in the summary.

Masochistic simp simulator with an npc that's even worse than the generic japanese isekai, also pretty sure the MC would gladly chop off his dick just to get another heroine for the game's original MC, yes he's a original MC simp. The MC's intelligence is probably in the negatives and there's no sign of that changing. There's also no change in sight when it comes to his self esteem or backbone. Also has the useless and annoying system that is there to degrade the MC, but wait, there's also another voice in his head that's there to degrade him too.

Those plans are why I stopped bothering with this. Yeah, the author made her a pretty big cunt with no real road to redemption but I'd rather he ditch her completely. Not a fan of revenge porn at all so neither option is interesting to me. Not to mention that having a sex toy sidepiece while having a harem is really shit harem etiquette, you can't expect romance when you the MC still fucks around outside the harem.

Generic eavesdrop on my heart novel but somehow worse. The writting is upper quality, edited mtl. The author tried to add some twists like straight off killing one of the heroines, having a villainess that can't eavesdrop but is reincarnated(though she might be a shitty yandere so that might work for some people) or having the MC find out early that he's being eavesdropped on, but said twists just make the story worse. It tried to be special but really didn't succeed in any positive way. Especially him finding out that the heroines can hear his heart, it completely invalidates the whole premise and just became a messenger system where he can talk to them. It happening much later when he's expressed his true thoughts more and actually met most of the heroines would be okay, but this early it just kills the whole concept, might as well call it "I can talk to the heroines directly in their head" or something. The MC is very generic but with even less empathy than the usual chinese MC's, which says a lot. It also seems to be going the route of petty revenge against characters that didn't actually do anything in the present and have no chance of doing any of their future actions. If you're one of those 12 year old edgelords, you might find some parts interesting but I wouldn't recommend it because it's not all edge, if you're looking for a decent MC I still wouldn't recommend it since the MC is kinda shit. Just search for some chinese translations, they'll tide you over for quite some time until the chinese racism and nationalism becomes unbearable, but up until that point it's going to be a more interesting read.

Could be worse, could be better. The scope of the setting feels way too big to me but that's not a given yet. There's a lot of info dumpy stuff that I care very little about but mecha fans might enjoy the technobabble, The fact that he barely read the setting he incarnated in makes the the premise kinda meh and fails to scratch that itch that this genre would usually satisfy. I feel like it's a middle ground where nobody will feel satisfied. The biggest issue this has is the characters, so far there's not one character that's actually likeable. The MC is super submissive to the women so far, very little self respect present in him. Feels like he continued being a side character even after the memories got unlocked. A more proactive side character but one nonetheless. Smells very Japanese MC so far. The main heroine so far is feels like a generic chinese cold beauty with no redeeming feature beyond said beauty. The usual stupid cliche of the MC being sometime afraid of her obviously has to happen. The mc feels like her lapdog now that I think about it, literally has to ask permission to go out at night and he gets warned not to ruin the family name. The guy is then happy he's allowed to go walkies, it's kinda hilarious but also sad. The fact that he's trying to make the marriage work with such a character just makes it sad in general. The maid/second heroine is the worst offender, she's actively antagonistic for no real reason and the MC just keeps accepting the abuse. Please note that the MC has the memories of his body and even with an outsiders perspective can't tell what her issues her. Her role so far was to verbally abuse the MC in every interaction they have while the Japanese MC keeps wondering what he did wrong and how he can make it up to her. The rest of the characters either have other issues that make them meh, like the mother withholding arguably valuable information for a happier married life, or didn't get enough screen time yet beyond a scene or two.

Missing the mind control tag, 0/10 Also utterly hilarious how the MC kills himself in his original world because he feels like he's too dangerous, you know, implying that he's a good guy to the point of stupidity, but then starts mind raping everybody as soon as he reincarnates. The whiplash is unreal.

>Night City is the harem. Well, that's mighty disappointing. I'm not gonna give you any grief but many people will if this pops off, it is sorta fake advertising. Either way, good luck with the fic.

I vote for none, they all sound pretty bland to begin with anyways.

It's already better. Now if you could separate the narration from the dialogue into their own lines rather than 1 continuous paragraph it'd be even better.

He says her name way too much. Imagine having a conversation with someone, do you say their name every other sentence? Saying once or twice to make it obvious who you're talking to but otherwise "you" or not mentioning her at all is better. The only time her name should be spoken is at the start of a dialogue segment or when the MC himself is trying to get her attention. Also format this a bit, it's hard to read. Start every dialogue on a new line, Don't stick everything in a huge paragraph. [Narration goes here] >Dialogue from character 1 goes here >Dialogue from character 2 goes here >Dialogue from character 1 goes here [Back to Narration] >Dialogue 1 >Dialogue 2

I'm basing this from his inner monologue of which there is plenty. He does nothing else but obsess over stats and traits and even when he monologues about somebody, it's very impersonal or how to use them in the future. As I've said, so far he comes out as some sort of obsessed sociopath that simply can't connect with other people.

God I hope Athena ain't a permanent member of the cast, no matter in what capacity. Reading her lines is simply tiresome. If she MUST join in some capacity, I hope her speech impediment gets fixed.

He feels to robotic I guess? Or the author is too into the gamer mindset. I'd expect some form of attachment to the various characters that he's lived with for years now. Feels like he looks at everybody as game characters when he's clearly interacting with them on a regular basis. Or is he some kind of sociopath? I like it so far even if it's rambly but the MC is starting to become uncomfortable in how utterly little he cares about anything.

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5

5

Honestly very bland so far. Also rushed but mainly bland.