Deltora
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Deltora1yrCommentedHi everyone, thank you all for the suggestion to restart. I honestly think that it might be the best choice since it doesn't have many chapters. If you have any suggestions on things that I could improve on or parts that could happen later on in the story then please comment then. I hope to provide you all with a much better story and hope that you will all enjoy what I put out in the future.
Ch 27 Update- Deltora2yrReplied to Ragar67
That's fair. I was writing a lot of these early chapters late at night and I didn't really storyboard before planning this out so I was just coming up each chapter as I went.
"So, you're telling us that you were brought here from another world where we only exist in the pages of comic books and you ran a comic bookstore with your dad. That's why you know everything about us and the others?" - Deltora2yrReplied to Ragar67
It's just his frame and the fact that he recognizes all these people but they dont recognize him. Plus, the only new faces have been the Marvel Universe.
"Hey Bats, we got a suspicious looking character down here at the gym. I've got some of the young ins down here and this guy is pretty big. He's roughly 6'5" with a large belly and scraggly beard. He's got glasses and looks a little out of sorts. I hired him on as the janitor so I can keep an eye on him. I'll see what Green Arrow is up to and have him investigate this guy. - Deltora2yrReplied to Reykskjar
Low level undead never give a lot of xp.
[You have received 2 XP] - Deltora2yrReplied to Waluigi_1
I'm thinking he might have some bruised ribs or something.
For the situps he placed his legs inside of a crack in a wall and did it normally. By far, it was the hardest for him, as he felt as if he was going to puke blood after completing each one. - Deltora2yrReplied to
But imagine how good your quads will look after.
In order to complete the 10 KM run, he ran up and down the stairs countless times. To facilitate the push-ups, he used the stairs to do them, doing 20 at a time. For the squats, he followed the same procedure. - Deltora2yrReplied to CoffeeAficionado
Catwoman sees the criminal life as moreso of being Batman's target and stealing stuff. Harley is just being her natural psychotic self.
"I've just been thinking about what to do next. You two have all but left the life of crime behind but I'm still stealing what I can and going where I please. Maybe I need to change something else in my life." - Deltora2yrReplied to Jason_CannonCh 26 Milton Takes New York
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Calm down Kratos.
Almost as if the bloodstains were a part of him now. - Deltora2yrReplied to reb1
Love at first sight.
"Hey sis, you should ask Milton out on a date." - Deltora2yrReplied to KoRSitoCh 25 The Stone is a Shit head
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Mayhaps, I'm surprised people didn't pick up on who Venom was talking to and the purple easter egg.
Venom turned and prepared for his trip to Earth. He hadn't been back since Eddie Brock had been slaughtered by an unknown character. He had green hair, a pale white face, red lips, and the most horrific laugh he had ever heard. - Deltora2yrReplied to Godkiller04
I kinda wanted to use the OG version that's Blonde but might cross a little bit of the Supergirl version.
Milton loaded up the mail cart with some of the Wayne Tech stuff and set out on his adventure to the different floors. One his way to one of the floors he ran into a somewhat familiar face. It was Lois Lane....'s little sister Lucy. She had a nice curvy body with shoulder length blond hair and bright blue eyes. She was prettier than her sister, at least in Milton's eyes, but she was less talkative and gave Milton weird looks from time to time. However, that was understandable as Milton was taller than average and he didn't seem like someone you would see in a mail room. - Deltora2yrReplied to halloween20
Think of it like a magnet.
The material that made the Origin Dragon Grand Palace was obsidian, which was a special material. It was a material that could block all nature essence from the outside, but it was the best nature essence transmitter from the inside. - Deltora2yrCommented
I too have my Vital Yang Physique intact.
However, before they entered the Nine Dragon Palace, Su Han had clearly sensed that Hao Ren had an intact Vital Yang Physique. In other words, he was still a virgin! - Deltora2yrReplied to Reaper2504
Good question, honestly didn't even consider it when I was writing. I typically at about 9 or 10 o'clock at night so sometimes my ideas aren't the best. I'll look into fixing that point.
Prysm was right, Milton's body couldn't handle the blast, at first. Then Milton felt that strange feeling he felt in the past as he noticed his body began to warm up. Then his body started to glow. Before he knew it, he looked like Prysm and Prysm was now...naked. He took off his shirt as it luckily hadn't been completely fried.