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Alesinain1dCommentedwe with him becomes???
"The longer the door remains open, the greater the risk of Lith being consumed by the blue flames and we with him becomes. I don't know if I can win, but at least I can keep those bastards from winning."- Alesinain2dCommented
why did no one tell me*
"The blue flames never manifest when she's with Lith. She keeps the worst of him at bay." - Alesinain4dCommented
*we were* afraid that
"Yet we didn't hide in our rooms. We didn't keep our children at arm's length because afraid that the more they loved us, the greater their suffering would be after our demise. We spent every moment we had with them. - Alesinain6dCommented
what rotten luck. the "a" can be removed here
"Someone noticed the disappearance of the idiots and tipped you off. What a rotten luck we have." He sighed, looking at the scene of the battle. "As a sign of good faith, I'll help you. Cathras there has a book that matches your vague description." - Alesinain10dReplied to CometPunch
I hope he does learn is of future tense, I hope he is learning is present tense
"Honestly? I bet he does but I hope he doesn't." - Alesinain11dReplied to Alesinain
have to keep tenses the same
"Honestly? I bet he does but I hope he doesn't." - Alesinain11dReplied to CometPunch
never said it wasn't acceptable, but taking the context of the previous "do you think vastor learned (past tense)..." the response would he I bet he did learn. does learn indicates a future result
"Honestly? I bet he does but I hope he doesn't." - Alesinain12dReplied to CometPunch
I know it's gramatically correct. I was just suggesting changes that would make it sound less weird/easier to comprehend
"Honestly? I bet he does but I hope he doesn't." - Alesinain13dCommented
last* for one week and one day
As for Ryka, her remark wasn't so far off the truth. Solus had managed to make the sweets bought from the Traveling Tavern for one week and one day. It had taken her sheer willpower but at least she could say they had lasted more than a week. - Alesinain13dCommented
pick up*
"Did you pick anything useful with your Tiamat eyes, Lith?" Strider believed that Lith's tracking skills stemmed from a bloodline ability, not Menadion's masterpiece. - Alesinain20dReplied to Campino_41
I get that, but last I checked husband is a dude
Once she was done eating, Quylla took care of showing off her husband and all the attention with which she had showered her. - Alesinain20dCommented
she showered her with attention? replace either she with he or her with him and then it'll make more sense
Once she was done eating, Quylla took care of showing off her husband and all the attention with which she had showered her. - Alesinain23dCommented
circulate*
"Sorry." Lith apologized. "Now, before taking your share of Life Maelstrom, I want you to focus. Don't send it to your yellow eye. Just circulated it through your bodies like you did with Ryla's abilities." - Alesinain24dCommented
not much longer* or not long
"Not much." Feela the Behemoth, Aren's Garlener counterpart, said. "Our local mines can provide the raw materials for the new seal and the transoceanic Gates will give us the rest." - Alesinain26dCommented
these kinds of wounds*
'I don't care. I can take this kind of wounds. My Divine Right array gives me more mana than the repairs will take. Also, by bathing in the underground world energy, I can recover much more quickly than I would by standing on my feet. - Alesinain26dCommented
comma after master.
None of those abilities came from the power core of the tower. Menadion had built it to assist her and give her the means she needed to exceed her limits. Unlike a cursed object, without its master the tower was just an elegant pile of stones. - Alesinain29dReplied to WarStrider72
niblings is correct. it's the term for nieces and nephews
"I'm sorry, but after our return from Jiera, living with your family made me understand how precious you are to me. Seeing Lith with Elysia and realizing how much your niblings look up to him, made me more than envious. - Alesinain29dCommented
if, in the future, she*. commas here are helpful
"I know that she did terrible things in the past, but if in the future she merges her life forces like I did and bears children, do they deserve your wrath as well?" - Alesinain29dCommented
needless* to say
"Useless to say, my lair endured more fires than a forest during a dry summer. I had to spend almost ten gold coins to replace everything he destroyed before I knocked some sense into him." - Alesinain1mthCommented
while avoiding the risk*
"No. You see, this place is indeed barren, but the volcanic ashes are a great fertilizer. It's because of them that the nearby lands can be cultivated all year around or risk of soil depletion." Valtak said.