Jims_Rid
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Author, you did a good job. I have a suggestion though. I noticed that everything so far has been under control. Every impossible moment, the MC has a sure fire way to survive so while he has been put under pressure, he hasn't overcome any impossible moment so far so it might be a good idea to let the mc experience moments of desperation. His fighting style makes it so that he can be aggressive and retreat all the time so I understand that it would be difficult to put the MC in that kind of situation unless he's facing the likes of Nagato, Obito, and Madara. I would say that your work is one of the best fanfics so far, on par with Outsider's resolve but as long as you can pull it off with another character or characters other than Itachi madara obito nagato or even reanimated hashirama or minato, I would say that your work would be the best so far. But it's okay since your work is still one of the best so far. Anyway, it's just a suggestion
3 chapters per week at once sounds good for you, you get more rest and all while one chapter a time is good for the book. Uploading one at a time will keep your readers hooked up more, you'll find more discussions per chapter. What happens when you upload chapters all at once is that you'll find all the discussions on the last chapter. Readers will usually visit the book once per week. Which means less discussions and votes. Uploading one at a time makes it so that there will be more discussions and visits to the book every week. more visits = more votes and more popularity.
I don't know if you have a sibling but this is not how I imagined Sasuke as a kid with a younger brother. The most likely scenario would be Sasuke trying to smile and look strong in front of the younger brother to assure him that everything is going to be alright. Then he would say something like "I'm going to continue my studies at the academy. Don't worry, leave everything to me. Just stay here and be good blablabla". What kid asks the younger kid "What are your plans?" as if they're the same age.
I haven't read this yet but I'd have to disagree about your opinion on bows. Bows and arrows are actually decent even in the naruto world. There are plenty of applications for bows. Arrow trajectory can be manipulated with wind style, improving accuracy and even power. Also, have you forgotten Sasuke's jutsu during the final battle, Indra's arrow? It was just a jutsu but other than naruto, I can't imagine any one else having an answer for it aside from DMS kakashi and the Otsutsukis or perhaps barely Minato
Imagine how much cooler it would be for Konoha to deal with Akatsuki, Orochimaru, and Danzo at the same time? Imagine how this could affect Takuma's growth as a Shinobi. Instead of dying early, which wouldn't affect anything, it's better to see more of the most hated characters in the series. Perhaps, the author could turn Danzo from hated to loved, or even cool villain.
He has everything under control, at least on the surface. But this is the naruto world we're talking about. He will be silencing Danzo but what if in the case that Orochimaru or Kabuto revives Danzo? Divulging secrets to dying men in naruto doesn't seem to be a good idea, even if it's for the satisfaction of readers
he's a ninja. there's no point in showing it in public in the first place. however, the part that makes sense is the training itself. since rasengan is the pinnacle of chakra control, just the training itself would help the mc improve in chakra control, even if he doesn't master it
this is stupid. no matter what, he's a kage of a village and he should not be making this kind of mistake due to arrogance. he should have known that Danzo is tricky. this is a very stupid mistake
It could also be possible that he could stop it but he just turned a blind eye to it for the sake of his clan
It's basically the same but you have to take note that he's the author. He's not obliged to post chapters everyday. He can skip a week and just post one chapter next week and you wouldn't be able to do anything about that. If he skips one day and does double chapters tomorrow, he's being generous. Being an author and having to upload everyday can be tiring, especially when you're a fanfic author where you can only rely on fans for funds to keep going