hey hey hey shameless self-review here but i really wanna see what happens when the amount of reviews gets to ten, so it's all in the name of science. and my dignity, apparently. While I'm here, I might as well leave a disclaimer. Volume 1 is very very very to the power of ten bajillion slowburn. It's mainly characterisation + cameos from the big bads, and Volume 2 is where things really start to kick in. If you're worried about upload schedules and broken promises, Volume 1 is already complete. I've got a stockpile of about fifty chapters (give or take) just sitting there and ready for launch. I'd launch everything in one go if I could, but it's just not a practical decision as of right now. I can understand if Volume 1 is way too slowburn for your tastes, but I'll urge you to give it a shot anyway. Because I'm that shameless. Peace...?

hey hey hey. here's your review. i didn't read through all ninety-nine chapters, but I'll give you my first impressions. Chapter 1 - talk about a cold open. The first line alone practically establishes the entire setting by itself, and it immediately paints a picture of a devastated wasteland. The interactions we see in the following paragraphs all set the mood really well. Everyone is weary and tired of war, and at this point, death doesn't register anymore. They become statistics, that sorta thing. The MC's shell-shock is evident. We didn't even need him to mention that he was already insane. It's just that obvious, so nice job for making it as such. Him lashing out at the Ascendant is something that would fit, given how what he's been through. So, in conclusion - great job characterising the MC, and an even better job establishing the setting. Even though said setting is only around for one chapter and then the isekai kicks in, it was still really well done and I would've liked to see a ****y bit more about of the old world. That being said, it's a personal preference thing. Great job.

hey hey hey. here's your review: First off? The prologue. I absolutely love the opening paragraph. It just packs the right 'oomph', and not 'oomph' as in the cold open or 'haha gun go pew pew'. It fits thematically (which is something I'll be addressing in the next few paragraphs), and the description of the bird in question is very vivid. Forget just the first paragraph. Language aside, the entire prologue flows smoothly, and its sequence of events are woven together in a natural way. The death of the bird could be handled slightly better, but I get the intent behind it and that's all that really matters for now. There are a few anachronisms though. It's just the vitamin D thing - according to your synopsis, it takes place in the 1800s, but the first vitamin was discovered in 1912 (correct me if I'm wrong). It's a small issue and doesn't matter in the grand scheme of things, but I gotta pad this review out somewhat, eh? Again - I've mentioned this, like, two times in my past reviews. Writing good dialogue is the quickest way to get my interest, and you've written some pretty great dialogue here. Feels like actual, living kids are talking in chapter 2. The setting they're in fits as well - it gives off the vibe of this really rustic and quaint European town somewhere in the 1800s, which I gather is precisely what you were going for. Well done. That's my review. I hope it helped you out!

Let me preface this by saying that I absolutely a d o r e your setting. Theology and biblical history are some of my favourite things to read about (cough cough His Dark Materials) and your synopsis alone just hits all the right spots. It is a pretty niche topic, though. You've done it proud. I won't pretend that I'm an expert on matters like this - I mainly dabble in other pantheons and ancient civilisations, so I'm out of my depth when it comes to Canaan (Levant?). That being said, I'll treat the setting without its biblical connotations and pretend everything is fully original unless stated otherwise. The first chapter gives me major Hunger Games vibes for some reason. When Lev talks about receiving a Blessing so his family can get the money they need, it's like how the kids in District 12 had to sign up for tesserae to get more food. of course, it's different in that these kids aren't being forced to go into an arena and butcher each other, but I just wanted to bring that up. Tangents aside, I love the dialogue. It's normally my go-to indicator when I judge what makes a story good and what doesn't - in my opinion, dialogue fleshes out characters in a natural way. Provided, of course, that said dialogue is natural in and of itself. There are times when it comes off as a tad expository, but in the end, it all flows very well and it feels like actual people are speaking. Especially the 'oy vey' at the end of chapter 2 - y'know, it just clicks. Even the steam vehicles. All in all, the exposition is handled very well. I'm not that bothered by the massive walls of text, honestly. It could do with some better paragraphing, but the explanations of the world around them do the job quite well. I would've preferred it if it was dialogue-ified, but I can't have everything. Amazing read, adding it to my library. great job, 10/10 would totes recommend except for stability of updates, but that'll probably change sometime in the near future.

Hi! I'm going to be reviewing your story. I'll start off by saying that it has its own charm? I'll be upfront here - certain things aren't really my groove, so that naturally gets points docked. Nothing on you, of course. It's a personal preference thing. Disclaimer over, let's get into the meat of things. Anachronisms and suspension of disbelief aside, it's very easygoing. Quite carefree, really. It does come off as the sorta thing you'd read if you wanna wind down after a long day at work or school because it's written with this nonchalant style. I mean, quoting old Vines does help out with that a lot. On that note, the casual references he makes do serve a purpose besides being just 'haha funni meme ref 69420'. It's a decent reminder of how this is all one big game and the repercussions of the actions they take won't carry the same weight in the real world. So yeah. Here's my review. I hope it helped you out. I'm not at liberty to recommend stories like this to people because I don't read books from this genre an awful lot. But for what it's worth? Giving this a shot definitely won't hurt.

Hi there! Here's your review. Just a heads-up though - I'm more accustomed to doing really really long critiques, so this one might be a bit janky. Now, I'm not exactly qualified to critique horror/thriller because it really isn't my cup of tea, but I'll try my best to critique what I am familiar with: Namely, your characters. I'll be honest here - I quite like Rose. Her interactions with other characters and her little internal thoughts are oddly endearing and realistic. She does have some slip-ups, but they're not too bad to the extent that my suspension of disbelief is broken. Overall, she is quite a fascinating main character and she's grown on me a lot over the few chapters I've read thus far. The vibe you have going for your setting is i m m a c u l a t e. The way they're written kinda gives me the whole 'flickering lights in an empty hallway' sorta vibe, and it absolutely suits this story. It's also not like the few other horror stories I've read thus far. You don't really overdo it on the gore and I'm grateful that you haven't used it for the cheap shock factor, which is nice. To summarise - Rose is an excellent character, and the setting descriptions hit all the right spots. The lady in the elevator too. Chapter Two in particularly was actually pretty scary. You really do get a feel of what young Mr Anderson was going through. Everything just radiates feelings of kenopsia - it feels hollow and empty, and depending on what you were going for that turned out really really well. Definitely suits the thriller vibe. soooo yeah here's my review. hope i helped out!