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This book is absolutely wonderful. The characters go through a moving journey yet it's heartbreaking and inspiring to watch them. I can't wait to continue following their journey.

Books and stories aren't written like this. It needs detailed descriptions and, most importantly feelings. You use he said, and she said but how do they say it? It should be like he said happily, she replied doubtfully, she said surprised etc. Also, describe the room describe their appearances. In essence, bring the world to life. I feel you have a very long way to go before you start writing your own books. I'd recommend that you take a year to read other people's works, actual books or webnovels. After that, I'd recommend choosing one to emulate.

It's a really good story. The plot is quite unique as I haven't seen others like it and the writing quality is really high. Readers will definitely not be disappointed.

This is an interesting read. It's a story idea I haven't heard of, making it all the more intriguing. I would recommend expressing your ideas more concisely to keep the reader's mind captivated. Apart from that, it is truly an interesting read and I can't wait to continue reading.

at least on a forum there are some knowledgeable experts

Thanks for trying out my book. Constructive criticism will be well accepted. So feel free to communicate.😁

😙 but who honestly wouldn't

Haha

there's like a 24hr watch on those things

there will be multiple. about 4 - 6 the number is just my guess but there isn't just 1