Amataratsul

He absolutely demolished grands in his sim

Gotta respect the hustle

She changed the law magic to fairy law.

What is the obsession with armies, conflicts in cultivation worlds are always about who has better high level fighters

He is afraid that he will come for him

God a Chinese novel that actually uses emotion

It is a shame it got mid at the end

Someone literally just compared this to Pokémon and this is the next paragraph, spot on

You have potential, the book is good for a start, I would recommend for future books you do to have a character sheet (somewhat like a D&D character). This will help you with character consistency. For the support characters I would recommend doing the same only for the most important and how you want them to develop. Use this information to figure out how the characters would react in the worlds they are in, also do not hand everything to the characters as this undermines the plot. Work on these and you could be a top 10 fanfic writer with a decent patre0n membership.