TheSIothKing

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I understand your frustration, and honestly I respect your opinion. If that is how you truly feel then I can agree with you. However I still hold to the mindset that you could approach these communications in a better way. Public relations can be a big part of growing a community and sense of commitment to an author and his crafted worlds. I have huge respect for people who make something and share it with the internet, thereby subjecting it to all the hate and vitriol therein. I just believe you could craft your responses better while still conveying your argument and stance without coming off as so aggressive and callous. But then again many authors have forged stronger core fans through hate as well, and if you want to go down the J. K. Rowling route, that’s your prerogative. Good luck in your future.

This is a foolish mindset. Criticism isn’t shared by all, as most cannot be bothered to complain, they’ll just delete it and move on. For every person showing their frustration with the main character, there could be tens to hundreds of others who share the sentiment, but don’t offer their opinions. Think of YouTube comments vs. YouTube views. To grow as an author and as a person, realize that by accepting criticism from your fans, who’ve taken the time to read your novel and offer their opinion (whether it’s constructive or not is a different conversation), you’re adding to your story narrative, and showing fans you care. Reading your comments to how you reacted to the first negative review you received is why I won’t be reading this novel, not the review itself. Do better.

Before anything else, I have to commend the improvements in writing style and grammar that the author has had. When I first started reading his previous novel, White Online, it was very difficult to even force myself to read the novel, let alone care about the characters and plot. Rebirth doesn’t share that problem, and for that, again, I greatly commend the Author for their improvement and achievements in writing. That being said, this novel has a similar problem to many others on this site. Pace. It is what I like to describe as frantically slow. Every chapter feels like something monumental is happening or about to happen, whether with the overall plot or character development. And yet, when you look at the story from a bit further away, you realize that 100 chapters have gone by, and barely anything has significantly progressed. Eragon, one of my favourite childhood stories, is 58 chapters long and covers more than most novels on this site. I’m sorry if I’m saying the quiet part out loud, but it feels like a deliberate attempt to suck more coins from readers. It’s understandable why, since WebNovel itself further incentivizes this with their contests, and it’s needed for the author to make a living. Unfortunately it comes at a cost, both to reader retention and story development. I wanted to like this novel. It had great hallmarks: regression, strong reasons to progress, and great starting points. Unfortunately, but for a different reason from White Online, I’m dropping this novel. I need to see more story progression and plot points, and right now all I feel like I’m seeing is pushbacks and breadcrumbs. I’d like to emphasize that this is my own view and opinion, and I encourage everyone to make up their own minds. Please read at least the free chapters yourselves, and let me know your own conclusions. If nothing else, the grammar in this story beats about 90% of the others novels on here, and the premise for the story is fantastic. The story hooked me, but wasn’t strong enough to reel me in.

I’m… confused. You’re upset at what? That I made a review about my opinion on the book? Isn’t that what a personalized review is? I’m not representing anyone or anything but myself. I laid out the reasoning for my review, and let others know what I thought. I understand if you don’t agree, but there’s no need to call someone else’s taste “trash”. That seems purposefully hateful and non constructive. I may not agree with you about this book, but I don’t wish to call your taste in literature names. Just seems a bit rude. :( Instead why not lay out the things you like about the book, so someone reading my review can have an alternative point of view before trying it themselves?

Damn right. People write whole articles about frogs with a slightly different tongue. I write ”essays” about grammar mistakes in otherwise interesting webnovels. We all have a finite amount of time in this world. What we spend it on should be important. To me, this is important, as the author surely believes their story is. To you, perhaps ridiculing others about how they spend their time is important. No one knows but you! P.S. The first chapter has more than one grammar mistake. I actually couldn’t find a whole paragraph without one. Lol.

I’ve found my fun. Calling out reviews that have factual errors that are glaringly obvious. Lol.

Dude I don’t think we’re reading the same novel. The very first sentence is structured wrong, and has a grammar issue. “World’s first, highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online is going to the sale tomorrow!” Why is there a comma after first? There’s no second comma, so it isn’t a pause for effect, nor is it an explanation comma. If you were going to put a comma anywhere in that sentence, put it after VRMMORPG, as you’re explaining the first VRMMORPG is White Online. And don’t get me started on “…going to the sale tomorrow!”. What even is that?!? Is the sale a place and White Online a person, like saying, “Tom is going to the office tomorrow!”? Again, are we reading the same novel? (Btw, there is way more glaring grammar issues, it’s just funny to me that the literal first sentence you read has multiple. Lol)

Dropped on Ch. 1. Glaring grammar issues. I’m really annoyed with any sort of grammatical issues, so I try to only read off of the top charts of WebNovel. It looks like I need to wait until this gets enough traction to get a rewrite or, at the very least, a proofread. The first sentence has a grammar issue. Lol.

… Wait. Earth joke. Falls flat. . . . FLAT EARTH CONFIRMED. EXECUTE ORDER 66, “PUMP IT UP”.