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Kaijit

Kaijit

Lv2

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2018-10-03 JoinedIndia
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  • Kaijit
    Kaijit5 years ago
    Commented

    It would make more sense if MC has background in gaming. So all the decision he takes like choosing Pandora Box and understanding his stats. Makes more sense

  • Kaijit
    Kaijit5 years ago
    Commented

    Premise sounds unique. couple of constructive criticism . 1. Use some online grammer check. 2. Conversation between MC and his mom sounds to rigid. it should be natural as it's between mother and her son . But apart from that . It's looks interesting .