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Vedoril2mthReplied to glenTy
"Some of the extraordinary items we gather and retrieve are just too important and magical. If they fall into the wrong hands, it would cause immense destruction. Therefore, we have to keep it strictly confidential and watch them carefully. Even we can only use it under special circumstances. Besides…" With that said, Dunn paused for a moment before continuing, "Besides, there are some things inside that are very special. They had certain 'living' characteristics which can entice the Keepers. It would influence the surroundings, attempt escape, and cause catastrophic outcomes. They have to be strictly controlled."- Vedoril3mthCommented
Maybe edit 'got them off' to 'got them out.'
The eight members of EVE, along with Jay, went back to their dorm, all with indecipherable expressions. They wanted to retaliate when Mr. Ong revealed they were going to represent a cheese ball brand, but Jay quickly got them off before they could. - Vedoril5mthReplied to Vedoril
- Vedoril5mthPosted
I've read this up until chapter 40. Things were mostly fine with small errors. Repeating chapters once and character names getting mixed up a few times.Right at chapter 40, when the content becomes locked, the quality takes a nose dive. I couldn't read more than a few paragraphs before coming to post this and remove it from my library.
- Vedoril7mthCommented
A couple of repeated paragraphs.
This book has been deleted. - Vedoril8mthCommented
This is literally a repeat of information given just before this. I've seen this a few times in this novel. I'm not going to make assumptions about why the information is doubled, but it should stop.
On the narrow strip of land connecting the two mini-islands, they constructed a defensive line that stretched for about fifty meters. The Naga Warriors stood in the center, bearing the brunt of the enemy's assault, while the pirates flanked them, providing support. - Vedoril8mthCommented
Do you want to eat a snowman?
"Am I worse off? The start of the snowy mountain is painfully cold, and the surroundings are filled with Snow Ogres and Snow Wolves. My snowman army is just a snack for them. F*ck!" - Vedoril10mthReplied to manpapper
No, the way this phrase is used is correct. Other ways of expressing this could be things finally boiled over, things were brought to light, etc.
This caused everything to come to a head. All this time, Hailey was being patient with Lixin, believing that one day he would fall in love with her. However, upon learning that he loathed her, she decided to take what she wanted from him. - Vedoril10mthReplied to Anone
Wasn't there supposed to be two sets of demonic revolvers and an item to combine them into one? Pride and Greed I believe.
This was a good ranked weapon, and frankly speaking, none of what Bob had offered to him was here. Everything was different, and it was weird how he had not noticed the guns, and how just after seeing this, he also noticed the set of a dozen bronze ranked throwing knives that were supposed to go into his jacket. Cole sighed, something was up with this place…. Or in the end it could just be lazy writing. Now for the stats. - Vedoril1yrReplied to VedorilCh 39 Cheer up.
- Vedoril1yrReplied to Nomanalive
If it's spaced out and gives something to the story then it's fine. Like the addition of where the injuries are was nice. I'll keep doing this slowly as I read and mark ones that seem kind of un needed. It's a nice little addition but having to work it out word by word and not just copy paste is a bit slow. I'm sure the pace will pick up the more I do.
Ch 37 Proton Canon. - Vedoril1yrReplied to Nomanalive
I think they're asking for the morse code in the comments section or a paragraph comment to copy and paste. Otherwise I'll just continue doing this myself and slowly posting the messages.
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If she was a human, the areas zero five was stabbed in would be the upper section of the latissimus dorsi and the erector spinae. The organs that would've been damaged the most are her left kidney, and the right side of her intestines. The morse code translated...I'm pretty sure
Ch 38 A tough battle. - Vedoril1yrCommented
AS THE STORY DEVELOPS I PLAN TO RELEASE SOME OF THE DETAILS THAT DON'T MAKE IT INTO THE CHAPTERS, BUT IT WOULDN'T BE FUN TO JUST GIVE THEM AWAY LIKE THAT! There. I took the time to decode the morse code at the very end of the chapter. Screw it. This is what I'm doing now. I'll only read this when I have the time to do this so no one else has to.
Ch 37 Proton Canon. - Vedoril1yrCommented
This might not get seen but this should not be listed as a chapter. This is something that should be put into an auxiliary volume/chapter. While myself and many others undoubtedly appreciate something to reference the levels of progression and items gained, it definitely should not be the first chapter of Volume 1. Make a volume 0, name it auxiliary, glossary, etc. and leave the info there.
Ch 1 Prologue - Vedoril1yrCommentedCh 45 Chapter 45: Night Running, accompanied by a cool breeze