Acl_grafix

The mix of first and third person perspectives is annoying, especially since they switch in the same sentence/paragraph repeatedly, I'd suggest editing this to third person completely (as it's the best perspective for reading imo)

this chapter killed the entire story for me, no matter how you try fixing it, Harry is dead and now Osiris is MC(no way to save 18 years worth of memories/personality against 20000 years)

I tried to read this but the writing quality is horrible (made it to ch 13 before the headache became too much), it reads like a bad MTL, if you can find somebody to edit this then it might be a good read, but as it stands it's just painful to try

harem

Is there any romance in this? Or is it a harem or forever-alone type story?

do not insult the greatness that is sprinkles on bread

how's he got voldies wand? should be with wormtail

how'd he lose a level?

what's this story actually about? The synopsis tells us basically nothing, is it a male or female protag, is it a Hogwarts or pre/after story?

and this is why I try to avoid anything to do with time travel, it always hurts my tiny smooth brain