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flosvloom

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2018-09-13 JoinedPhilippines
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Commented

    they're such a cute couple

    Ch 4 With closed eyes I see everything in you and me.
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    [GL] Aurore
    Fantasy · moonsside
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Replied to Claire_Mendoza

    I'm waiting author. Do take your time tho. No rush or pressure. ❤

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    The Mysterious death of Ladesma family
    Action · Claire_Mendoza
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Replied to PrincessLacie

    thanks for telling me.

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    I BECAME THE VILLAIN OF A NOVEL
    Fantasy · flosvloom
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Posted

    Writing quality for me is on peak. idk how tagalog writing goes tbh, but I like how the words flows so easily. tho i feel like there could be some improvement more if the author wrote things in a normal taglish way, so it wouldn't seem confusing. like for the age for example. character design, i cant really tell much since there is only about 3 chapters and its too short per chapter, so ill wait for more chapters and give my other reviews for other qualities. updating stability...needs a lot of work to do. world background, i feel like it lacks a a bit description on the setting. like use the five senses for example. how the blood smell, how it made him feel, how the texture feels, what the mc see. so on and on. weather and etc, clothing and appearance too. about the story development, I kinda want more exposition first before being thrown to the actual inciting incident. but im looking forward on how things will go.

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    The Mysterious death of Ladesma family
    Action · Claire_Mendoza
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Replied to Quin_z

    No, I thought people normally call them comfort room, but I guess I lack research. Thanks for informing me tho.

    I swallowed, feeling my stomach churn in my stomach. 'I think I need to go to the comfort room,' I thought, feeling the anxiety crawling to every inch of my skin. 
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    I BECAME THE VILLAIN OF A NOVEL
    Fantasy · flosvloom
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Posted

    Giving myself shameless review. Because why not? Writing quality is fine. Well, for me, it is. Story development is getting there. Not entirely, but the genre is about fantasy romance, so I'm still working on the romance. It's a slowburn, typical, kind of approach. The story is more concentrated on each individual's growth, but romance is there, don't worry. Character design: very stubborn naive mc with a slight character development. MC is weak and ignorant at first, but she will grow more in later chapters of the story. Or maybe in this middle. Updating stability: I'll try to update once in a week, but recently, I've been uploading loads of chapters. World Background: Not bad. It's full of magical creatures and magical realism. Magic system is a mix of both hard and soft approach. Setting is set in a mix of both modern and medieval style. I mean, the magic technology in the world is a bit similar to modern time. While the rest is similar to medieval. There are culture and all the stuff that makes the story more realistic. Does it have happy ending? Yes, it will have Happy Ending with lots of angst first.

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    I BECAME THE VILLAIN OF A NOVEL
    Fantasy · flosvloom
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Replied to Luuk_Duindam

    they're invading a new planet. People will need to build colony, kingdom, empire, nation, or country. The game is there to teach people the groundwork. The basics of building a new nation.

    In that world, he would never let his sister be alone. Not only that, he would let Bing’er become a princess in the game, a real princess.
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    The World Online
    Games · Sheng Xiao Jian Ke
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Replied to Abiskar

    same title: The World Online. MC Name: Ouyang Shou or something like that. The setting is also the same as this one. But I think this novel also has some ingredients from the novel: The Reincarnation of the strongest swords god. it's a mixed of everything.

    Ch 1 Rebirth
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    World Online
    Games · jdbeue
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Commented

    there's a novel like this very similar to the writing of this one. It also has the same title; just different character names. And the mc is more cold and calm-headed in the other novel.

    Ch 1 Rebirth
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    World Online
    Games · jdbeue
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom1yr
    Commented

    Have I read this before? why does this look so familiar?

    He jumped out of his bed and looked around. It was his old room, his old bed, and his old VMMORPG controller.
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    World Online
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Posted

    First of all, the writing quality is great since it was really easy to read the flow of the story, and although there were a few grammatical sentences, you can still read it like a flowing water. The development of the story was slow-paced but it has a good potential. The world building was specially great and it made the whole story interesting to read. One thing that really botheres me was how the author force relationship on the protagonist... like how the relationship between Cleo and Sophie became how it was... there was no struggle or obstacle at the beginning of their relationship... and their relationship felt very superficial to me... although they both prioritized each other but with how their relationship begun... it just felt too lacking with the beginning of their relationship... on the other side, Sophie's (MC) relationship with Astrid, Qiana, and Rachel was very understandable... the four of them have that special event where they became close because of their environment and circumstances... but the author chose to separate these four and only left MC to Cleo which I think the heroine. However, I like the plot of the story.. it was interesting... but the romance was a little lacking, although, the author made sweet flirty and fluffy scenes between MC and the heroine... but still felt too lacking and it just felt like a shallow relationship... I was a little disappointed with the romance considering that it has a yuri tag.

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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented

    their relationship started too early for me... they did not even have a special bond or an event happened before they became that close... I think that Astrid and her other friends has more special bond with Sophie than Cleo

    "I applied for us to live in the same dorm apartment…. I am certainly looking forward to spending some lovely nights with you," Cleo winked suggestively as she purred softly.
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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented
    "Fac me gravitate!"
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    The Spider Queen
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented

    such a long name

    "Well my full name is Cleopatra Vostrir Resall Niltos-Sisrelis and I'm currently sixteen years old."
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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented
    Did this girl want to knock her up?!
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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented
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    The Spider Queen
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented

    I'm just wondering what happened after sophie and sui meng fused...

    She felt no need to become a backyard beauty in a vast harem. Not to mention she didn't like guys!
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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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  • flosvloom
    flosvloom2yr
    Commented

    i love her personality. very realistic

    Ch 3 A sharp tongue with no strength
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    The Spider Queen
    Sci-fi · HopelesslyRomantic
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