brother_pheonix
The written word reflects the soul. And souls writing of worlds they remember will draw those who will visit them later.
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brother_pheonixan hour agoCommentedA very nice chapter. Has good flow and still maintains attention of the readers. You learn quick
- brother_pheonix16 hours agoCommented
Thank you Charlotte!!!
- brother_pheonix16 hours agoCommented
Charlotte... Write the damn thing propperly
- brother_pheonixa day agoReplied to Jhaydun
some things can be jaunted when describing sometimes. patiently read through them a time or two and see how they flow. Anything from a key turning in a lock to the sounds of a person walking within haunted halls can be jaunted, point to point. Its our job to make the points flow. The shadow key hissed as it entered the lock. the click of release echoing through the empty halls of Orlins mansion and Kai who alone lived within.
- brother_pheonix2 days agoCommented
well laid out though some parts could be a little smoother. still good though
- brother_pheonix3 days agoCommented
Thank you for the chapter. Now I'm just getting images of a the chibi king.
- brother_pheonix3 days agoCommented
the SFX are a nice touch and should be left in the story. And these chapters have had me on the edge of my seat.
