Spellings and formatting :/ There vs their, One is for a place, the other a person. That place over there. That person has their purse.

Seems promising, keep up the good work! Some weird dialogue but nothing too bad.

David isn't very bright is he...

Get it... Other hand.

Just gonna leave my stones here with you, that ok? oh and can I take a look at the next chapter while I'm at it, I forgot mine at home. thanks man.

thx for the reply, loving the story. If I seemed annoyed that was not my intent. I just felt there should have been more tension between Chaos and the Orcs.

really, she just forgot?

kinda disappointed ngl, makes all the of the orc tribes sorrow and grief completely irrelevant. It would have been interesting seeing how he manages the tribe filled with the wifes and children of the orcs he killed. I understand that this is a fighting novel but the whole 'just slap a contract and they now slaves' just seemed anticlimactic.

Take all my stones... PLUS ULTRA!

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it's percentage based, so the spark costed 10% of his total mana.

shut up and take my stones!

So... he's a respected leader, because he's respected? it's unnecessary to put respected twice, pick one or the other. then you can give an action later on in the story which shows how's his respected nature. or you could've added some backstory here eg" As one of the few retainers of the King that have gained his nobledom through exemplary service during the such and such war. he is respected by all who live in his domain.

why are there no character limits...

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

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It's pretty bad, the entire novel lacks suspense, tension, stakes, challenges whatever you might call it, as well being uninspired just overall lacking in every department except word count. I'm not gonna bother doing a more indepth review as there is nothing to review. I was surprised seeing this this high on the ladder ngl, although this is webnovel.