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Spellings and formatting :/ There vs their, One is for a place, the other a person. That place over there. That person has their purse.

Seems promising, keep up the good work! Some weird dialogue but nothing too bad.

David isn't very bright is he...

Get it... Other hand.

Just gonna leave my stones here with you, that ok? oh and can I take a look at the next chapter while I'm at it, I forgot mine at home. thanks man.

thx for the reply, loving the story. If I seemed annoyed that was not my intent. I just felt there should have been more tension between Chaos and the Orcs.

really, she just forgot?

kinda disappointed ngl, makes all the of the orc tribes sorrow and grief completely irrelevant. It would have been interesting seeing how he manages the tribe filled with the wifes and children of the orcs he killed. I understand that this is a fighting novel but the whole 'just slap a contract and they now slaves' just seemed anticlimactic.

Take all my stones... PLUS ULTRA!

:)