UselessYato

Love these wholesome chapters. Just finished my midterms and hope yours go well!

Should be Makuhita(top middle) right?

I like how you’re currently writing it with the fast plot development but slower slice of life chapters thrown in between the plot points. Makes the story feel more lively since we’re experiencing their life without needlessly dragging out the plot or just killing interest with an extended arc of just slice of life.

I understand that Esdeath’s character wouldn’t care and would probably even agree with this..but damn that was creepy af. This one moment literally turned Kizaru into a discord mod..

Not the biggest fan of HP fic’s but I’m down to try both, especially the original story. Please post an announcement for your new stories in this book so we know when we can find them. Thanks.

It was fine, honestly hard to notice a perspective swap when the story mostly seems to be 3rd person. This isn’t a bad thing at all by the way and I can’t speak for others but I like how we’re able to see an over arching point of view with the surface thoughts of multiple characters in one scene.

Loving the story so far, keep up the great work and take breaks as needed!

I mean everything he said was cannon. Naruto didn’t get the Uzumaki sealing scrolls that Konoha definitely had, didn’t get the property that his family owned, and didn’t get any of the money that an Uzumaki princess and 4th Hokage should have passed down. Hiruzen didn’t even teach him Rasengan which was literally a Minato original. Only learns it from Jiraiya way later.