PrinceOfChaos
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Honestly, this could have been a good book, but I'm sorry to say this Author but you cannot write at all. No character development, no world development, and worst of all, even though what you write in english makes sense, your phrasing makes it seems like english is your fifth language. I recommend making a plan before you start writing your book, make a timeline and then re-read what you write with detail and expression. Not just YELLING every 3 seconds because you don't have enough vocabulary to compensate. A good way to fix this issue is to know a word of which you would place in the spot and find synonyms on the internet. Good luck with your writing.
love this, word count matthers though, so good job author. love the detail.
I don't think so, I kinda like the idea of instead of the MC being nice to konoha even when from other villages in other fanfics, this one wants his village to grow which makes it although seem nationalistic, is also loyal. you also have to understand he has grown up in this village and was not placed in a body of a teenager or adult.